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tree
injured
once again
bark peeled
truths revealed
deep roots, once strong
worn down through seasons
willow grows weak
weeping with the wind
of how life has turned out
scared to look beyond the pain
damaged from disrespect
beautiful once, now ashamed
as limbs are sawed into kindling
just a used up stump, awaiting death
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Author notes
Ok... so it doesn't resemble a willow, so call it inspiration of a pine!
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A contest entry
- Timber! by sheltered.
525 points, ended May 26, 2007, 16 entries
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I enjoyed this great poem of yours! And it is very true indeed! Poor trees! Nice tree of yours also! I forgot what its called when you make your poem look like pictures or are lined in a certain way.Great Job!
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Thank you!
Hello Lovless Asian Poet
Very nice to meet you and thank you so very much for such a wonderful compliment on my poem!
The form of this poem was developed by the contest holder "Sheltered"... He has named this form "Poetree" it has a certain amount of syllable per line to follow and if don't correctly should form a tree. Lucky enough mine did..lol
Sometimes other poets write poems in the forms of shapes of course then being called "Shape Poetry".
You comment is very inspiring and I thank you for stopping by and taking the time out to read and comment
Thanks
Jasminerose
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Linda, This was a very moving piece you penned here. It is sad to see the trees being destroyed and not always new ones being replanted. God gave us this green earth, he can not take care of it for us, that is our job. Even those pines will weep like a willow if not replenished. Thank you for sharing this beauty with all of us and I'm very surprised this didn't place. Kudos for you on a fantastic write. Love and God bless, Joyce
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awww thank you so much Joyce for such a beautiful compliment on my poem!
I completely agree that we are the ones that need to take care of our earth and all the splendor it offers!
Thank you for the smiles and for the Kudo's
Linda
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A beautiful tree you have pruned to perfection, though so sad it turned out to be just fire wood in the end Though that could be good eh? LOL..Great Timberrrrrrrrr form..wonderful entry...I read between the leaves, poor tree...good luck in the contest! Ken IBT
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Beautiful and sad, such wonderful imagery and depth of meaning and more. You seemed to have done all this and in such form! Good Luck in the contest and all the best!~
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Great use of metaphor...I love weeping willows - they're strong too. My grandparents cut theirs down several times, only for it to grow back again.
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What a very nice willow tree. Ok so your drawing skills aren't as good as your poetry skills.lol Awesome use of metaphor. The last line really completes the poem nicely. This is a beautifully written sad poem.
Eric
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oh my
My friend, this is so very beautiful and intense...
Flawless form, language and flow...
Another amazing piece by my dear friend...
Love ya
Best of luck in the contest, Sweetie!
Lynda
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Presented with perfect form. Metaphorically alluring to double meanings, plays within the words.
Excellent post!
Good luck to you.
Des
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Pretty good form and perfect sylable count. Flows smoothly and has good metaphor and imagery. Nice job. Thanks for entering.
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Thank you
lol Now that the contest has ended I can reply
Thanks Sheltered for the wonderful comment on my poem and for holding such a great contest!
This was a fun challenge! Hope to see another one of these soon so I can work on my form once more
Thanks again and have a wonderful day!
Jasminerose
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Nice, sweetie...a good commentary. Nice form and I like the way you did the trunk!
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A very insightful poem indeed. But hey, willow, pine, same thing. xD lol. Great job though very metephorical yet still literal. Nice piece, best of luck in your contest my friend.
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