Blood pours down my wrists
Tears fall from my eyes
I'll just smile and pretend
That I'm not
Feelings for you arose quickly
While the flames of love
Burn deep inside of me
Loveless
Your smile, what i love forward to
Your eyes, keep my focus
Your beauty, keeps me sane
You love another
I am left a cold shell
Of what i once was
Loveless
Thoughts run through my
My emotionally drained mind
Thought of ending it all
All that I have struggled for
Gone, in a jealous rage
Loveless
Please tell me what you think
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Deep...
and scary and when I say scary i mean its so deep the way you feel to me as a reader its scary watching the blood from your wrist but it was passible I liked it ~ julia ~ -
Wow, you really bring emotions out in this and it really pulls the reader in. Very well written and structured
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you really do have an amazing way with words. this is really intense and raw and overflowing with emotion. i love it. great job, and i really hope that you're doing okay.
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i think everyone feels this way at one point but not all of us can express is as well as you just did there has been times when i just want to give up on everything because i feel so alone but then i just open my eyes and see the people that are really there. Things to happend for many reasons and if they didnt work out then they are not ment to be it just means that there is something better out there and you just need to look a little better. great write as ushual im happy your back into writing. I missed reading you stuff amazing job!
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I can really relate this to some of my own feelings I think that is definately why i enjoyed this poem. I found it more soulsoothing for myself which may sound strange but i believe it was because it applys to alot of feelings I've had before.
I love the title.
I hope yuor ok if this is about you.
El
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