tonight[and yesterday]were perfect nights;
bright&&windy;not too cold, no heat involved
but the kitchen walls were perfect
to hide behind the [see through]glass
bottle after bottle was pulled from hiding.
its alcohol in apple & lime;
crushed out mountain dew cans
liter the counter in green
acting as chasers[but hiding the illegal act]
she cant take too much
she can stop before she loses
her perfect balance&&control
[but when tomorrow comes;
she'll lose to him]
no alcohol tonight;no intoxications
shes perfectly sober;it's all gone with yesterday
he leads her away from any interuptions
but she knew somehow this wasn't right,
he has her at the wall;
releasing her clothes[as she asks him to stop]
hes bringing her to the floor
and pressing his body[too hard]against hers.
Pain;sharp && unbearable rocks through
destroying her barrier & taking innocence
before she can begin to scream
but shes pushing him away
& he lets up [reluctantly]
but her body is already violated
its already destroyed[no more innocence]
she held that part of her for so long
&& now her body is ripped and bleeding
she now sits by herself
life going on below her;
normal conversation, normal lives
but she can feel the pain,
the cold[tiled]floor on her back
&& his unsteady breathing over her skin
hes wet;shes dry
its only pain;his perfect pleasure
he wont understand what hes done
[but he knows its something wrong]
shes losing a[not so]pretty[oh so]dirty disaster
m. m. o'malley
5-20-07
Author notes
this is my story darlings.
option 10
"The starry night sky, bleeds failure from your eyes."
option 3
[Can i be your shooting star disaster--x]
options 2 & 5
love happens once in a lifetime. the difference lies in how many time you're willing to live in the time that you're alive.
i love you all♥
WishMeAway--x
A contest entry
- ♥ Rip My Heart Out [&&] Give It To Her ♥ Drop Dead; Gorgeous ♥ by forbidden-colour.
300 points, ended May 28, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~All Types (Please Try)~ by XxXAmazed MeXxX.
475 points, ended August 21, 2007, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - [Pain] by whiterabbit..
360 points, ended October 14, 2007, 40 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Losing Innocence by Number 13.
600 points, ended October 12, 2007, 25 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - oogaboogashoogalooga...this is serious by Starlette.
525 points, ended December 7, 2007, 150 entries
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600 points, ended January 13, 2008, 24 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Can I Be Your Shooting Star Disaster--x by Dead Star--x.
475 points, ended March 5, 2008, 33 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - "The starry night sky, bleeds failure from your eyes." - Options by xxRainbowDawnxx.
450 points, ended April 3, 2008, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Beautifully written here. Very expressive and raw, with deep emotions. Great choice of words to convey emotion, I could feel each word.
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thank thank you very much.
and also for the silver.
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This is such a good poem and sad. But I love it!
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well thank you very much.
♥
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amazing great write i loved it. your writing is great, gives detail but still lets me make up my own thoughts on the idea. great job.
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well thank you very much.
im happy you liked it.
♥
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holy shit... i dont know what to say♥
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i still dont know what to say either.
i wish i could make sense of it too.
thakns baby.
♥
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This is pretty good. I like how you wrote it. Keep up your good work. Thanks for entering. Congrats on your gold trophy and your bronze trophy and your honorable mention. Best of luck in my contest!!!
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thank you so much for the HM.
and im happy you liked it.
♥
always.
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Wow, this is just wonderful but so sad. I'm so sorry this has happened. It's almost happened to me before. No one deserves to have to go through this. I really love this piece but I'm so sorry that you had the experience to write about.
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thank you.
its not fair to even ALMOST happen to them. to you. for it to happen as it did to me. if i could i'd rethink going to that house.
again thank you.
♥.lovelove.Lady
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Love it
This is a wonderful piece I have one similar...Its called Bad dream I think if you would like to look at it. Sorry for everything. There are always people you can talk to!
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thanks so much
and thanks for the gold doll.
♥
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Beautifully written, though it is a horrible subject, it is so sad that stuff like this happens.
Guys like that should be nuetured, they don't deserve pleasure once they have caused such pain.
I like the 'hes wet; shes dry' line, I like the contrast but also its like the oppisite of normal yin yang, where she is wet and he is dry, such a reverse.
Also the part about 'life going on below her' it kind of makes it like she is above all that normal stuff, doesn't matter to her as much, but she is isolated.
Your an amazing poet.
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It'll get better hun =] I promise... eventually =] ily =] ♥
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thanks darling, i love you bunches.
♥
p.s. thanks for the clappy mens!
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Tragic,
Can Relate To This.
Beautiful&&Sad.
Mwah
<3
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i wish i didnt relate to this in any way. i wish it never happened.
is there any way i can know your story too?
thanks darling for the comment,
♥ChaosinLove
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omg baby... omg.. are you.. omg.. honey are u okay?
Christ i want to kill the bastard bby. This guy makes me so angry.. it should never EVER happen to you bby, EVER. I love ya hunni..
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thank you baby. i want to kill him to, my friends do to.
as of being okay. no, but i will be. i can get through this and i know i can. this shouldnt happen i know, but it does everyday.
i love you too darling♥
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hon, it's a really sad, depressing, horrific story. i so totally want to go over and kill him for what he did to u. not even joking. it makes me sick to think about what he did and also angry, like really deep anger too. i love u too
<3 Jenerali
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thanks honey. so many people want to kill him too. i guess chad and a bunch of other people are going to kill him this weekend. idk baby, i love you too♥
[[Chaos]]
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