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In a Matter of 30 Seconds

Throb. Throb.
A tingle, and a Throb.
The pain shoots to your head.
Throb. Throb.
Your eyes burn and you feel light headed.
Throb. Throb.
The pain subsides.
Wait, what?
THROB. THROB.
Nevermind. It's back.
Throb. Throb.
Tiny needles stabbing all at once.
Throb. Throb.
Pass out.

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Last winter, I dislocated my shoulder twice. I've recently re-injured it.

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  • abuyi
    May 24, 2007

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    hope now ur arm is fine.. intrestin poem here.. its short , direct and simple
    i like tiny needles stabbing all at once line


  • shuvi
    May 24, 2007

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    AWESOME

    LOL, yeah! this is what pain feels like.. gone, and then back again! ouch for u, hope you get well soon.. cool write.. keep the pen rolling, lots and lots of love and cheers, shuvi


  • suup jordan
    May 23, 2007
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    this is a great description of what pain is really like.
    great job with it.


  • EatYourSunlight
    May 23, 2007

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    Oh..dislocated shoulder? sounds like your doing some drugs acually but im glad that wasnt it. nice though. good rythm
    xoxox

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