we're [so close to]p e r f e c t i o n;;[so close to d e a t h]
Author notes
hope this works for you baby.
A contest entry
- Just One Line ---> Give Me Your BEST! by A Murderous Lament.
450 points, ended June 4, 2007, 127 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is the best one-liner I've read, ever.
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well...
thank you very much.
im happy you think so.
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I Love This .x.
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thanks, im glad you liked it.♥
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I see a lot of these middle school kids do things like this.. with the five hundred semi colons and parenthesis everywhere and double &&.
I might just meeting some new form of art or something. Is there a significance to it or is it just simply how you chose to do it? Either way.. to each his own, right?
I love the line, i must say. Just not a fan of the form disguising itself as an art-form. -
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well, im glad you liked the line for starters, as for some significance? well, not really. i mean, life in general is diguising as you put this art form, so we make, i make, my poetry diguising. i hide certain words and meanings by using other words...like glitter or plastic, as you may find if you read any more of my stuff.
idk, whichever way you chose to view it is your choice. thanks for the comment though.
Love.♥.
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we are indeed.. the double semi colon seems to distract from this piece though.. great write and good luck in the contest!
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I must admit I'm a fan here. I love polar poems and you were able to do that in a one liner. Kudos to you.
Justin.
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hey, thanks so much. im glad you liked it.
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Beleive me I did.
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well thats always good.
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Almost as good as this one liner.
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pretty baby
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thanks baby
ily♥
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I was kinda confused by the authors note. I do love this line Great job !! Good luck in the contest
A MURDEROUS LAMENT <\33 -
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i was just saying more like, i hoped you liked it.
thanks for the comment.
♥Chaos
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