Dirty {pretty} princess
in your tattered rags
and second hand crown
(where is the Prince Charming you were promised?)
so very long ago.
Sitting {pretty} in the corner
humming ever-so-soflty
counting the l|i|n|e|s in the bathroom floor tiles
(between dry heaves)
as blood from my fingers
d
r
i
p
s
d
o
w
n
{poisoned} little papercuts of your former
promise
mixing with the g*l*i*t*t*e*r
I had l-l-l-licked off you just hours before
(sugar-coated confetti love notes)
leaving heart pounding
and visions of sugar plums {dancing} in my head...
My prizes for another successful {Saturday} night.
Author notes
My 1st "dirty pretty" attempt...
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I really like it. I'm not one for the punctuation but I can see why each thing was used, it's relevant, not random. So well done to you
It doesn't hurt that you have some brilliant lines 
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this was really good especially for your first attempt...youll do really well with it...there wasnt to much punctuation...is was just enough...great job and keep writing
xXsewn2getherXx
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I LOVE how you write Kris! The imagery created a movie in my mind that I could follow! I love the visual effects you put into the writing, making the words "drip" and *glitter*. It really gives it affect. Bravo for another great write!
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Very interesting. In a strange way it made me think of alot of the cutting analogy that is out there... it is interesting, intense, and incredible....I just used illiteration sorry couldn't help it.. anyways I love this poem the flow is neat, the style amazing, the simplicity perfect.. I do not know how you do it. Great job yet again on leaving your fans amazed at the wonder of your skill.
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Excellent, especially considering it's your first attempt at dirty pretty. Doesn't come off as cliche at all. Adored your word choice. Good luck to you in the contest.
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I must admit at still not being quite sure what exactly this new trend towards"dirty pretty" poetry is, but I have a general idea I believe. The name iself "dirty pretty" seems sort of an oxymoron as there is so much "ugly" hidden in and behind all that glitz and so called fake glamour [tragic actually] but I must say from the little I do know about it , you hit the mark with this one.....much love n best wishes,
reenie
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I really like this especially the ending. While it is rather cliche I think you managed to pull it off. Well done & good luck in my contest x
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