To the amazing dirty-blonde girl,
[You're not Alone]
This is my poem...
It was dark as he tightly gripped my wrist
Pulling me some place I'd never been before
You shoved me to the ground holding a knife to my chest
The blade slowly grazed down separating the threads of my clothing
I could hear the bugs chirping loudly and my heart pouding so hard
As you took your filthy hands down, down, down
Staring up at the starry-lit sky, I try to hold back the tears
Lying there defenseless wondering why I was your victim
The stars fade to black; I can feel you going in and out
I try to push you away, but that only fuels your madness
Forcing your lips against mine and your eyes fill with fire
Much like the devil himself, laughing as you thrust inside me
When it was all over, you disapeared into the night
Any innocence left within me escaped with every tear
Somehow I felt I deserved this, letting the darkness eat away my sanity
Should've been stronger, should've ran away...
Shouldn't have let you take away whats rightfully mine
But now it's too late to take back what you've done
Days turn into months, months into years
You soon realize that time can't erase the painful memories
But I won't let you bring me down to your level
For I am nothing that you are
Author notes
By bloodstaindmind
I wrote this for someone special. It's really not that great. Hated the ending. This piece was not a real-life, personal experience. And I know I really can't say that I know how it feels because I don't, but I do know that horrible things like this happen more than people think and all we can do is stand tall and grow stronger. Anything less will get you nowhere. For what doesn't kill you only makes you stronger. You've got an amazing friend!
A contest entry
- friendship and rape - dedication to my friend. by petrichor.
700 points, ended June 2, 2007, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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WOW!!!! How I can relate to this one! And for not having experienced this yourself, you did an amazing job on it! I have been there, been that victim, I can soooo relate to this! Congrats on the Honorable Win! Well deserved!
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"When it was all over, you disapeared into the night
Any innocence left within me escaped with every tear
Somehow I felt I deserved this, letting the darkness eat away my sanity
Should've been stronger, should've ran away...
Shouldn't have let you take away whats rightfully mine
But now it's too late to take back what you've done"
This is such a strong piece, and for someone who has never personally experienced this, you wrote it with great accuracy (or at least I would imagine). This is wonderful; good luck in the contest♥
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This is Excellent
Beat it up if you want to but you captured the event from beginning to end. Sad though the event was you described it well. I had no misunderstanding as to what was taking place. I disagree with you about the ending. The ending is strength coming forward an inner angel acknowleging self where you are where you are going and what you are not. Peace...
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I loved the ending, it tells the truth mixed with someone to keep her spirits up and encourage her to go on.
Again I have to state that you are my soul mate, because you mentioned all the things about the knife, bugs. And he did have a knife and it was in a park. I truely believe you can read my mind, lol I love you.
But seriously stop doubting your writing, this is wonderful. And for you to put yourself into something you've never experienced, it's great.
'Should've been stronger, should've ran away...
Shouldn't have let you take away whats rightfully mine
But now it's too late to take back what you've done'
It's exactly how she feels. Just amazing that you managed to get that.
Thank you so much for entering.
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Glamourous Comma,
I don't have a clue as to what the heck you are talking about ? -
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and why would you?
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