I never met you but I know you from your eyes,
Did someone drag the stars down from the skies to make them sparkle,
And did you know that now theyre gone the night is not so bright,
One day they could have guided someone home.
I never met you but I know you from your smile,
You must have stolen from the sun to make that beam,
Maybe you didn't know you brightened up the winter,
It's so hard to see how this world did you wrong.
I never met you but I know your complexion,
Such eyes of honesty with wounds not far behind,
I always wondered if I'd ever know reality,
Your fading face brings my feet to meet the earth.
Author notes
supposed to be simon and garfunkely....
A contest entry
- two hundred. by Captain Obvious.
875 points, ended February 8, 40 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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really beautiful!
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Wow! This really is a intense poem. Very well thought out. Totally deep. Blessed Be! ~~Shannon~~
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lovely
conflicting emotions for me in every new verse. don't know whether to feel sad, or lonely or possibly betrayed, but it is excellent either way!!
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The connection!
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very good
yep, those dudes were it
i like the pretense that two never met
but
knew each other by their smile, eyes, etc
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aww this is a really sweet write, lovely idea with stars, I know I've had that said to me once, and I loved it, very flattering.
great write, i really enjoyed this, xx -
I never met you
Yet I'm certain your eyes sparkle starlight in the night. Your words like melodies to soothe and heal all wrongs. Your honesty makes skies crystal blue even when bitter cold. I never met you until I saw your poetic words unfold.
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This is beautiful! I think you did a great job on this one! and it is well worth being in the feature column. reminds me of something i would say, but yet, never got to. thanks for sharing this one!!!
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Sigh
Wonderful write. The emotion is just flowing from each word. The imagery is remarkable vivid and so sweet. Great write.
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This is sooo beautiful.
I dont know what other words to say aside from that, but it touched me... and just the entire flow and the entire piece is amazing
I look forward to reading more from you!!
Excellent Write!
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goooooood
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This is wonderful and a great piece.
I love the way you put this one together.
A lot of great emotion and imagery here.
Well done and thanks a lot for sharing
this one here! Keep up the wonderful
work here!
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Line three **They're
Hrmmm... Nice. I like it in a kind of mildly fuzzy way. If that makes sense.
Well done. If perhaps a little cliché'd in parts. (Second line in 1st and 2nd stanzas).
That said, in context, worked well.
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Erm... That said, you haven't logged on in almost a month, so perhaps not such a helpful comment.
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"I never met you but I know you from your smile,
You must have stolen from the sun to make that beam,
Maybe you didn't know you brightened up the winter,
It's so hard to see how this world did you wrong."
fantastic. YOu did a wonderful job on this poem Intwine. Marvelous, keep it up
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This is such a good write! It kinda makes me think of (in my case, failed) pickup lines, and it goes so well together here! I especially like the last stanza: "Such eyes of honesty with wounds not far behind", because it makes me think of people I know and love who have scar-ridden pasts. You did an excellent job!
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Great Job
I love the "I never met you but I know from your eyes"
Eyes are the window to your soul. You can tell so much from a person by looking into their eyes.
This is somewhat weird, but when I read this, It makes me think of a child who has been abused. How could anyone do that to someone so innocent.
This is an amazing write. Wonderful job
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I never met you but I know your complexion,
Such eyes of honesty with wounds not far behind,
I always wondered if I'd ever know reality,
Your fading face brings my feet to meet the earth.
This is just a soft delievry of the emotions of the heart revealing the poetic melody of the love and its feelings my friend..I love this heartfelt poetry indeed..you are touching the hearts through your muse here...This is an amazing poetry here as you are penning with the ink of your love and with the pen of your soul....I understand its inner picture which reveals the philosophy of this true love my friend..you are revealing the concept of the truths of love and its pictures in our life here. ..
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oah...this is so wonderful... I love it. I really love it..
Brilliant
Midnight
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Great, Truly Amazing
I like this piece. I have a friend who is like this, her smile is so genuine that you just want to put your arms around her and never let anyone hurt her, but you know she has deep wounds not far beneath. Actually, I have more than one friend like that. I think that, essentially, there's a little bit of this poem in all of us, that you or I may have a great smile, just something special about us, that some may see but others can't. It's all in the eyes of the beholder.
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well this's exactly how I feel getting dreamns of prince charming n it's usually some1 I never really met this's indeed true I never met him but I know one day he'll b there
I never met you but I know your complexion,
Such eyes of honesty with wounds not far behind,
I can see his wounds just like mine calling to b cured calling for me but i never met him so i dunno who is he ,sweet write,well done -
Um, Well, took the words right from me. They are beautiful words that I would so like to caress you with, but they are not my own. And that would be plagerism.
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i only wish it would've kept going.. i was really getting into this! it felt like you just stopped short - and the meaning was so powerful.. what i didnt get though (or what confizzled me) was i never met you but i know your... - that to me was a little off.. but hey, i understand where you're coming from and i guess thats all that matters, right? right? lol - okay im done ranting, ill shut up now
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Hey man...!!! you are surely a great poet and I love the amazing write..the imagery is beautiful and strong and is very deep!! it rhymed good too at some places which was the best part..The lyrics make this one of more importance and this one is just amazing.
this is a great job, and i look forward to read more of yours. ANd do take a look at my work too, i wud be very thankful to u for this act of kindness best of luck for more!!!
God bless,
Love,
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In my experience I've met several people like this. Ones who really don't stand out in the crowd until you get a good look into their eyes. Then they touch your heart with their radiant sincerity. I like the layout and the flow of this easy to read and understand piece.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
ps. Thanks for reading and commenting on my work. I do appreciate it very much.
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