This is a question of accountability
No one accepts responsibility
And those in authority
Just force pills down troubled throats
You don't even need to know the problem
The solution's already mixed up in bottles
Chemical
Alchemical
Alchemical burn
You're trying to turn lead hearts into gold
Fix everyone with your magical potions
No one asks why
Why does that little boy cry
Maybe he just wants to talk
But now he can't talk through the chemical haze
Can't walk through the med-lined maze
Pills are the answer to everything
The more pills the better, or so it would seem
And when the solution is so clear
How can he not drink it down?
A contest entry
- completely anything you want! NO RULES WHAT~SO~EVER! by ibsons hysops.
1000 points, ended May 30, 2007, 65 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Greatest Have Always Been Originals by Socialgremlin.
565 points, ended June 18, 2007, 5 entries
Honorable mention
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It's a very modern topic - drugs in a culture that hypocritically demonizes recreational use while using "medicine" to control behavior. I love the change from chemical to alchemical, showing our current dependence to be as foolhardy as the medieval attempts to find a immortality elixir. The style and form were very original... randomly using rhymes, different line lengths and rhythms, all interplaying in a chaotic harmony. Perhaps using more original symbolism, instead of lead to gold and magic potions, would make the poem's effectiveness even more powerful. Overall, a very good piece.
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Interestingly Intelligent!!!
Very true feelings that come with even deeper wisdoms about the pharms out there in lala land whom grow fat off the weak. I agree with Most of what your thoughts are about on this powerful subject. Best Of Luck In The Contest, You Are A Finalist!!!
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Too true, as young as two and three now.
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nice...thought-provoking...i thoguht it might have been seperated into stanzas though.what do you think?
H.
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Es possible... o.O I shall think upon it.
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