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Dusk

 

 

 

Sun blushed clouds in a heavenly sky
Float gently past on the evening tide
Of luscious orange and sweet sapphire
As burnt reds tell of scorching fires
Slowly darkening as the sun gets low
Letting off its final cadmium glow
Before giving way to blackened night
In a beautiful spectrum of twilight

Author notes

Beautiful picture, makes me wish I was a gold or silver member!
Well thanks to Never Fall In Luv, the picture is the border x

Pretty pink ponies prance around Polly Pocket planes
Option 9
Option 10: Poems under 10 lines.
Story: George just ate a muffin and is feeling a bit sick

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  • daviscth silver member
    March 4, 2008
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    This is such a pretty piece....


  • leander Moderators member
    January 26, 2008

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    Ooh, colours and imagery I like that in poetry, and that's what you have done here I'm assuming the picture is included in the border?
    Thank you for entering the contest!
    Leander


  • Unperson
    October 11, 2007

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    "Sun blushed clouds in a heavenly sky"

    What a brilliant first line! Some of the nicest imagery I've seen in a while. It realy paints a picture, so much that you don't need the border to see it in your mind. Lovely write, and thankyou for entering!


  • Entwining Beauty
    September 15, 2007
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    yes wonderful i love it


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    September 3, 2007

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    I wrote a poem very similar, dusk is such a beautiful time. I would often look up and watch it whilst I lay outside. It can be extremely romantic too, if right in the sky.


  • Dageek2
    August 25, 2007

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    Wow. You describe the sunset so perfectly. I love your adjectives. wording, and flow. Really good job and good luck in the contest!


  • Beating gold member
    August 5, 2007

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    Just to be clear, the picture you got inspired by is the one in the background, right?

    I love the poem. It is so poetic and beautiful and I could go on and on about it!


  • queens1
    August 1, 2007
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    Lovely!

    Fabulous description of the sun as an artist air-brushing the clouds as it sets.
    Patty


  • RatherImaginative silver member
    July 31, 2007

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    I see sunrises as an experience to be enjoyed most often alone, but sunsets are meant to be shared. Your descriptions couldn't be better at painting the picture, and within that painting, you've captured the serenity of the moment. Thanks so much for entering my contest!


  • DancingRed
    July 3, 2007

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    Wow, simply gorgeous descriptions; sunsets are truly amazing.
    You've beautifully re-told every stroke of colour and light. Your words are passionate and fiery.
    Great piece. Thanks for entering.
    DancingRed.


  • AutumnsFlame
    July 2, 2007

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    That is a beautiful picture, and for a description poem of only 8 lines, you described it quite well... thank you for entering this... your rhyme is perfect. Good luck in my contest.


  • Rainy Days
    June 16, 2007
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    Great imagery, I felt like I was there. It flowed very nicely, too.


  • RevHead
    June 13, 2007

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    wow. great imagery here i like how youve encorperated the background into the poem. very inventive this was an amazing poem, and i enjoyed reading it thankyou for entering, goodluck, Ampd


  • Naridill gold member
    May 31, 2007

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    Orange! I think the orange does a wicked job! Especially with the awesome picture and beautiful poem!
    I really liked the poem, had a nice flow and interesting ryhme. Loved the imagery!!!
    Bunnies for uoi
    and cheesy grins..

  • piccola silver member
    May 25, 2007

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    Great picture you have painted here. Hope you do well in the contest! The orange is a bit much for these old eyes, but love the poetry!

    • Death of the Author
      May 25, 2007
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      Yes, I am sorry about the orange, I know what you mean. Orignially it was black, but my friend made me the border as I am not a paying member...somehow this meant the colour of the background changed, but I thought it was a worthwhile sacrifice for that lovely picture ^^ Anywho, thank you for your comment x take care x


  • sassylilpoet silver member
    May 24, 2007

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    Hey!

    You stole the words from my mind...the one's that I couldn't find to describe a stormy evening that I spent last week on beautiful Cape Hatteras Island. Beautifully written, thanks for taking me back for a moment, to my little piece of heaven.


  • Never Fall in Love
    May 24, 2007

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    This is a beautiful poem
    You really are getting better at nature poetry
    Maybe you write better poetry in this angle
    either way, a change is really good
    I love them myself
    Keep up the great work
    much luv

    NeveR ♥

    ps: the background looks good


  • Entwining Beauty
    May 24, 2007
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    this is very beautiful write thank you for entering into my contest.


  • Gigglegasm gold member
    May 24, 2007

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    Very nice! I love,

    Sun blushed

    ^^ Really nice phrase...
    These, however, are my favourite lines,

    Before giving way to blackened night
    In a beautiful spectrum of twilight

    Simply beautiful! Wonderful piece! Thank you for entering!

    • Death of the Author
      May 24, 2007
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      Hehe thank you for your comment, it's funny cos one person says they don't like the last line and then you say you do! Thanks again x take care x

  • phoenixonfire
    May 24, 2007

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    Hey! This is awesome! I love the refrence to nature in different forms..dusk,twilight,spectrum...its a bountiful as well a beautiful imagery packed poem! Way to go!

    Thanks for entering and good luck!
    hugs n kisses
    preets


  • W a s p
    May 23, 2007
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    Oh yes!


  • Random Lily
    May 23, 2007

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    Wow. I really like this poem. You /are/ good at nature stuff! Really, really good. The rhyme and flow was all very good, except, I thought, for the last line. It doesn't quite seem to fit. Otherwise...so beautiful.

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