Your yellow blaze of lion's mane intrigues
with lofty roars to light a day in spring
and sturdy green supporting from fatigues
as morning birds a twitter call and sing.
Your spring debut is bold against stark ground
and lavishly you field your silky shade
to all who wander lost in your surround
of vernal joy filling bouquet cascade.
With glory to the season, your light cheers
where hope of rebirth and new life is made
upon your coming through the many years
so sweetly as you sing your serenade.
Oh daffodil who billows on green hill
reminds the soul of life within it still.
Copyright © 2007
Pamela A. Lamppa
(All Rights Reserved)
In a list
A contest entry
- BATTLE OF THE SONNETS---ROUND 1 by mamad.
400 points, ended June 3, 2007, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - BATTLE OF THE SONNETS ROUND 6 by mamad.
2400 points, ended August 10, 2007, 3 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Congratulations on a well-deserved silver, Pamela!
I find your writing to be so inspirational. I absolutely love the smells I encountered with this piece. Daffodils have an entrancing effect on me.
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Thank you. Wow. It has been a bit since I wrote this and I learned so much in this contest. So pleased you enjoyed it. I love a Daffodil too. Just so strong and sturdy as one of the first blooms in Spring.
Thank you Don. ~Pamela 
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Lovely
The daffodil is such a common yet cheerful flower, one of the early heralds of spring. It is hard to read anything original about them. And yet you gave me: "with sturdy green supporting from fatigue" (an interesting thought) and "and lavish do you field your silky shade".
Very lovely! Congrats on the Silver.
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Not one of my better sonnets, but one I learned so much from. The battle of the sonnets competition taught me so much about sonnet, and still I struggle with it some. So pleased you enjoyed this one. ~Pamela
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Lovely lines to sumup.
'Oh daffodil who billows on green hill
reminding soul of life within it still.'
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nature
Thank you. How I struggled with sonnet in this contest, but oh what I learned about meter.
Thank you for your kind words. I appreciate them very much. ~Pamela 
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heartfelt congratulations on your silver award, dear pamela !
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marion
Thank you so much and congratulations on your gold. A terrific contest. ~Pamela 
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Many congratulations Pamela. A well earned Silver
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passim
Thank you so much and you too on your beautiful shiny bauble. ~Pamela
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Another wonderful sonnet for the contest my friend.
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Wandkia
Thank you so much Jim. Let me tell you, these are so much tougher than they look. I am pleased you enjoyed them. ~Pam
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beautiful
a beautiful poem. -
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candicesook
Thank you so much. ~Pamela
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uplifting and joyous!
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Thank you so much. I have learned much about sonnet from this contest, and luckily still have some locks left to pull. LOL.
Thank you again. ~Pamela
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ooo, thats such a pretty poem! you did a great job on the rhyme and flow, and the descriptions are great! a splended sonnet my friend!!!
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alivefromlove
Thank you so much. I about lost my mind with these sonnets. They are much harder than they look. I am so pleased you enjoyed this one. Thank you. ~Pamela
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A wonderfully well-crafted and delightful sonnet
that was very up-lifting and life-affirming. Best of luck in the contest.
David Michaels
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David
Thank you so much. These are much harder than one would think and oh by did I learn a lot. Thank you so much for your wonderful words. ~Pamela
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Beautiful!
I sudder at the thoughts of tackling a sonnet, but you have written such a beautiful one here! Such a classical tone with the rhyme and flow~
Always finding beauty in your words~
Hope you have a wonderful holiday weekend
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~lk~
Thank you so much. Much harder than they look, believe me. I am so pleased you enjoyed. Happy long weekend to you too. ~Pam
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bravo
A very stately and wonderful sonnet, so well and ably done! I loved it...bravo ...bravo ...bravo ...
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Eusebius
Thank you so much Michael. Thank you. I about lost my mind with these. Much harder than they look. Thank you again. ~Pamela
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Ooh, a Shakespearean sonnet! (I'm learning about those in English class) Colorful imagery, very creative. You make the stiff format of sonnets seem to flow! A challenge, I must say... I have never been able to write an acceptable sonnet, myself.
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Gwenaveira
Thank you so much. I'll tell you, I sure could use a few more lessons and had some really good ones today with these too. So pleased you enjoyed this piece. Thank you again. ~Pameal
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This is absolutely amazing! You are so good at these sonnets. I loved the first two lines
'Your yellow blaze of lion's mane intrigue
in lofty roar upon a day in spring' awesome!
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going nowhere
Thank you ever so much. I appreciate your kind words so much. These are a lot harder than you'd think. Your turn my friend. ~Pamela
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SO BEAUTIFUL!
They are often the first flowers of spring and their bright yellow color just brings one up and fills them with happiness.
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Puppydog
Thank you so much. These English Sonnets are much harder than you'd think staying with the strict Iambic Pentameter. I am so pleased for your comment here. Thank you again. ~Pamela
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DEAR PAMELA
You are always sincerely welcome, this was a real joy to read.
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I really like sonnets that deal with flowers and nature. Check Line 8 for meter. Remember each line must start with an unstressed syllable. Edit.
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mamad
Wow. This is so much tougher than it seems. I think I have it now. Could you re-check? Daffodil - Pamela A. Lamppa.
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a very lovely and graceful sonnet, and I am proud of you, since for you it is a debut to write english sonnet, it seems ... you have done very well, my friend ...
let's see what lady mamad thinks of your poetic creation ...
all the best to you,
maa
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Beautiful sonnet! This has so much lovely imagery; written with elegance. Loved this Pam.
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