There is a gulf between men and women,
two hearts try to fill with love,
but passion alone can't cover that void,
it takes understanding.
In the midst of intimacy
thoughts blur in the heat.
However, the days journey
brings so many times
when two hands
can't merely hold the other.
If eyes engage a moment demanding
hopefully what is thought and felt
will come in words
remembering,
we are not mind readers of your soul,
can't always see
the world as your orbs behold.
For two minds must merge as a vine
accept the other's difference
where a woman often sees deeply
into the meanings of hours
a man is consumed with surviving them.
So guide with care to bring us
to the point of seeing what you see,
never assume we will get it
by merely hinting at what you know.
A contest entry
- Calling All Real Men by MercurialMist.
600 points, ended June 4, 2007, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - (Men & Women ) What women do wrong to mess up their Relationships?What men do wrong to mess up their Relationships? by cali951.
450 points, ended June 13, 2007, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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i like this poem and the metaphors my favorite line is "For two minds must merge as a vine
accept the other's difference" it says just enough good job and good luck in my contest -
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Thank you for the wonderful comment.
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What an interesting view point... The poem was nice seemed a little choppy but overall it does well. Good luck in the contest!
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Thank you for the great comment.
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I really liked the message in this poem. I think that is a failing that most woman try to work on, I know I do. Then there is that fine line to becoming a nag. So much balance is needed, and so much consideration and thought to make a relationship work and become solid. You made a very valid point about the differences in the way men and women approach life, especially with the stance of men just trying to survive and women just wanting to think deeper about it. You wrote very thoughtfully about this topic. I deeply appreciate your entry. I just had a little bit of trouble with the last stanza ... the word "do" at the end, not sure what is meant here.
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Thanks for the wonderful comment. And for pointing out the problem on the last verse. I did get it corrected.
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that change helps ... thanks for taking the time to revise and edit a beautiful message.
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Thank you for giving me a chance to make the corrections.
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'where a woman often sees deeply
into the meanings of hours
a man is consumed with surviving them'
from a female point of view, these are words of wisdom.. Great write.
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Oh thank you. Relationships are always so hard. We just have to keep trying.
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For two minds must merge as a vine
accept the other's difference
where a woman often sees deeply
into the meanings of hours
a man is consumed with surviving them.
This is just Masterpiece Material!!! Wonderful creative words of wisdom - if only we could all see things the same (if only for one moment), but that would be dull I guess
This is just fantastic!! Bravo!!! Good Luck! Betsy
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Thank you so much Betsy. I guess if we really could all see things that way, we wouldn't need to put it in a poem.
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Aaaaaaaaw Dangggggg!
Magnificent piece You have penned and brings clarity to areas that can have a mist shroud over~
Beautifully worded with Powerful message that gently
Touches the Heart
Loved it!!!
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings too
and my Love
~ Desire~*~
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Thank you precious. You are always the heart of understanding.
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wow this is wonderful. i certainly admire the ability you have to grasp so fully in words such a topic and feeling so often misconstrued. really great.
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Thank you. Wouldn't it be truly great is if words alone solved our all differences?
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Wonderful!
"For two minds must merge as a vine
accept the other's difference
where a woman often sees deeply
into the meanings of hours
a man is consumed with surviving them."
Sigh, thank you for this insight, makes me quite emotional and weepy..lol...this does bring tears to my eyes, this is excellent, so softly stated!!! 
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Awww, thank you for the kind words. We all have eyes, just never the same sight do we? Thanks for the wonderful comment.
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I get this.
While I am certainly not old enough to fully contemplate the depth it takes to write this piece, I understand the message and moral in this poem. Powerful phrasing and wonderful topic. A vibrant flow, too. Great job.
Ryan
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Thank you Ryan. I don't any of us men ever get old enough to understand it all in terms of relationships.
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