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Acceptance


I've been
waiting so long
For that moment
in my life
Everyone says
Why do I insist
on having hope?
When I know for myself
that there is none
but every night
with tearful eyes
I pray that someday
she'll hear my cry
that she'll feel my pain
and run to my side
cradling me in her arms
shattering these walls

I've built so high
as she gives

acceptance;

reassurance

that I wasn't

a mistake

Author notes

"still under contstruction"

personal thoughts I need to express

picture: http://serendip.brynmawr.edu/bb/berman/images/Isle%20of%20Alone%20Soul.jpg

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  • TexasAngelOne
    October 13, 2007
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    Very Intimate

    The way you expressed your feelings made me feel every word you penned to the page. My heart was with you and I loved the way you were able to express these very deep emotions . I too hope you find the answer and she hears your cries because you are a godsend and could never ever have been a mistake....


  • penman gold member
    October 12, 2007
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    Excellent

    Another poem full of deep emotions written so beautifully.


  • Shawnnessy
    June 18, 2007
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    oh wow. beautiful. so wonderful. though it is under construction, it is wonderful.


  • penman gold member
    June 3, 2007

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    Excellent

    What a truly heart felt write that one feels so deeply. And the picture only makes it all the more powerful.


    • mypassion
      June 9, 2007
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      Thank you my dear friend..These are my thoughts, maybe someday my mother will see, "me"..God bless, and thanks again for the critique..

      God Bless, Brenda

  • Dixie
    June 2, 2007

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    This is a poem straight from your heart. It is not
    your failing but hers but it makes you feel the
    failure. You may never get the result you want from
    the person you require the acceptance of so let
    it go and hope she one day realizes what she did or
    didn`t do.

    None of us is perfect, and sometimes we don`t see
    what is under our noses.

    My mother was kind and looked after her family well,
    but couldn`t show love she didn`t know how. Sad
    for both of us.

    Poetry is a great way of speaking from your heart.

    Dixie

    • mypassion
      June 2, 2007
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      thank you

      for your sincerity and kindness of words..
      and indeed "Poetry is a great way of speaking from your heart" for this is why I write it truly is a good therapy piece for all..Thank you again, and God bless you and yours, Brenda


  • Midnite wolf gold member
    May 23, 2007

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    such a good write, i can really relate to this, especially to the following lines.
    I pray that someday
    she'll hear my cry
    that she'll feel my pain
    and run to my side
    cradling me in her arms
    shattering these walls

    I've built so high

    • mypassion
      June 2, 2007
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      thank you for reading and critiquing my poem...
      I just hope someday it will come true...
      God bless you and yours, Brenda


  • Endeavor gold member
    May 23, 2007

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    Very Good


    I pray that someday
    she'll hear my cry
    that she'll feel my pain
    and run to my side
    cradling me in her arms


    Pour your heart out and be relieved

    Rick

    • mypassion
      June 2, 2007
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      thank you

      so very much for your true and kind words..
      you have been a good friend, and I thank you for that
      this was written for my mother if you haven't already figured that one out. It was part of my homework for therapy..

      God bless and thanks again, Brenda

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