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A Perfect Day

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I close my eyes
and remember the smell
of fresh sage as it rained
near the edge of the desert,

 

entering the mountains
as the salt air
from the ocean's whisper


cascaded into the valley
in wild waves.

 

I never knew Life could be
as beautiful
as this landscape unveiled
before us.

 

Clasping your hand,

I gasped
at the realization
and you smiled softly,

 

stroking my long hair
along with the wind.

 

We were going to California
and you were showing me the path
leading home.

 

I don't think
we ever completely returned
from this sacred journey

 

where our hearts discovered
love & laughter
breathing fresh & free...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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My first & only trip to the West Coast with my late sweetheart Don, in 1996. We journeyed up & down Highway 101 along the coastline, exploring sights & sighs along the way. We went to Yosemite & Sequoia National Parks. We didn't want to return to Oklahoma. My mother had grown up in California; I got to see things she'd talked about when I was just a child. It was beautiful. He bought pearl earrings for me in Laguna Beach. We ate lunch in Santa Barbara at a restaurant that someone recommended to us. He had the austere dignity of a retired military man; when Don asked for a good restaurant nearby, the man took one look at me & replied, "The Quiet Woman". I wonder how he knew I used to be a librarian. LOL.




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  • Danny Beatty gold member
    November 17

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    Congratulations on winning the silver trophy for this fine memory of a poem, my Baby. You have told me about this trip a few times and it sounds like you really did have a good time and I'm glad that you have some good memories of your time together and that you were able to travel some, too.



  • poet2angels gold member
    May 26, 2007

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    beautiful

    Wanda
    This is so touching...such a wonderful memory that you recalled as you closed your eyes...
    Written with love in every line, this is amazing!

    Lynda


  • zaboo-mafu
    May 23, 2007

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    memories

    love the stanza
    "I don't think
    we ever completely returned
    from this sacred journey"

    awesome job, fluffing the senses... stroking the brain... thank God for memories like those...

    ~marcus

  • Rowan gold member
    May 23, 2007

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    Absolutely lovely, thank you for sharing how you came to this write, what inspiration. As always, you have a way of soothing a soul with your words.


  • individuality gold member
    May 23, 2007

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    ah i was stroking your hair cos i wanted to eat it it smelled of fresh fruit and i hoped i'd not choke on the strands ah seriously - a lovely poem here, light and loving with life love and nature


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    May 23, 2007

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    I, too, smiled at your notes...

    This is beatuiful...were you on the beach when I was? Probably, knowing what serendipity lies between us.


  • kaibab silver member
    May 23, 2007

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    Who wants to return...I haven't ever been able to to leave...so I guess I'll just stay here and applaud your wonderful words scribe of noble Nature nurturing now


  • fleur de lys
    May 23, 2007

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    I have lived in California for 6 years now and haven't seen anything yet obviously. This is beautiful and your poem is absolutely lovely, it brought tears to my eyes - your love sounds boundless and will always be . . . God bless you.

    Peace and love,
    Petratani


  • myorama
    May 23, 2007

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    Another magnificent write. This was so pleasant and poignant.'I never knew life coud be as beautiful as this landscape unveiled before us'. Truly wonderful. Arouses all the senses.


  • soulfultia gold member
    May 22, 2007

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    This is really wonderful, although you miss him terribly, I can only hope that in my lifetime, I will find one person, just one that I can feel that depth of love with, beautiful write as always, my pleasure to read ~Tia


  • tomisb
    May 22, 2007

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    The memories you have evoke the moment golden. The gift you make of this journey makes me yearn to retrace your footsteps. I know all the places you describe, but my memories are cyrstal in my heart, you have helped me see even more by the light of your words.
    Love, Tom B.


  • dking
    May 22, 2007

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    A personal journey revealed

    I love the sensory images you invoke; the smell of rhe sage and salt, the waves. Great work once again!


  • Nature Song silver member
    May 22, 2007

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    A picture told with the essence of beauty that only you could pen. Remembering things of the past. "Quiet Woman, a resturant, a linraian...certainly not you dear friend. Your words speak volumes and are not quiet at all!" ~Sie

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