You are so beautiful...
Like a perfect star in a perfect sky,
A wonderful moment, not knowing why.
You are intelligent...
Like Einstein's mind just flashing by,
Open and willing, bereft of "I".
You are erotic too...
Wild and sexy, dancing your dance,
Eros bubbles as I watch you prance.
You are also serene...
Willing to let live and give all a chance,
By holding your tongue, you let everyone dance.
And, you love to love...
Hold hands with me with a light up above,
And tell me about the problems of love.
And...you are so beautiful
Author notes
Our lives are mostly spiritual, don't you think??
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Comments
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Tears i came close to shedding cause you just melting me with such glorifying words. i love you lol and i mean the writer and sweetie you are dear. hugs
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Liked this...
A question here
"Emos bubble as I watch you prance."
Are you using Emos as short for emotions or did you
really mean Eros there, if so Eros bubbles...
Might I suggest AHH instead of And in the last line.
Have a wonderful weekend
-Eddy
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I actually thought the ending and the beginning were the weakest parts, not terriable, I just thought the middle parts were extremely good, that said I like the sperate last line and the use of the dots to indeicate a know doubt breathy pause.
Really interesting, fantastic in the middle and very good top and bottom.
Deserves more reads
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