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Feminine Control

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Feminine Control

Close your eyes, take my hand, follow me
The secret dwells beyond mystic sands
It’s time I showed you the great mystery
So follow me, come and let us join hands

The secret dwells beyond mystic sands
I’ll show you magic that dwells in the sea
So follow me, come and let us join hands
A magic power; that lives in you and me

I’ll show you magic that dwells in the sea
Ordained for women the sea is your soul
A magic power; that lives in you and me
Bestowed upon women to take control

Ordained for women the sea is your soul
Power over men that will set you free
Bestowed upon women to take control
So come dive with me, this you must see

Power over men that will set you free
Learn of your beauty and you will be whole
So come dive with me, this you must see
Learn of the power of the female role

Learn of your beauty and you will be whole
The power of a woman; you will agree
Learn of the power of the female role
Close your eyes, take my hand, follow me

 

 

 

Author notes

For my AP daughter Faith; come with me.

Pantoum

The Pantoum is a simple form yet more difficult to compose than the sestina. It is far more repetitive, for its defining rules are ABAB stanzas of four lines each, and the second and fourth lines of one stanza become the first and third of the next. It can be any number of stanzas long, but the ending line must be the same as the first. The result is a poem that takes two steps forward and one step back the entire way through, finally ending on the same note it started.
Form Resource: shadowpoetry.com
Art work by: Jim Warren

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  • roses on fire
    June 1, 2007

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    thank you!! i am so touched by this!!

    sorry it took so long for me to get back to you my computer was down for a long time!!! thank you mom sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo much this is beautiful and for me!!! i love it so you are an amazing writer!!
    thank you again

    i love you mom

    love faithyfoo


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    June 1, 2007

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    Love the feel of this magical poem you have written...It carries you away into it's depths and shows us many wonderful things~O' just love it...this one I do believe is my favorite


  • Swan song gold member
    May 30, 2007

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    The power of this poem is the form and the way you set the rhythm it allures and entices, almost puts me in a trance. I like it!!!


  • maa gold member
    May 28, 2007

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    what a wonderful pantoum ... this is one of my absolute favorite forms ... your message is very empowering and inspiring and very suitable for this form, since the repetitions underline it even more ...
    brava ...

    maa


  • poet2angels gold member
    May 25, 2007

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    a beautiful form that is always a joy to read. You have done this form justice with your powerful and beautifully written poem.,..
    TY for entering!

    Lynda


    • Amera gold member
      May 25, 2007
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      Thank you; your contest inspired it.


  • StarEyes
    May 24, 2007

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    Wow!!!!!! I have never seen this style before, and I must say I love it!!!!

    The write itself is beautiful! Leaves the reader feeling as if she can reach into herself and find any answer to any question that may be plagueing her! Great job on this one! Best of luck in the contest!!!!!!


  • PicturePoet
    May 24, 2007

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    Beautiful

    I really liked this poem . . . it's seems empowering to women, and I enjoyed the way you accomplished it. Superb!

    Sincerely,
    SilverMoonCat


  • Never Fall in Love
    May 23, 2007

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    This is a wonderful dedication!
    I especially loved the ending and i think it joined the whole poem together.
    The repitition wasnt annoying at all.
    It really added alot to the poem.
    lol .. I really really really loved the ending.

    Much love,
    NeveR ♥


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    May 23, 2007

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    Nice

    Great job with this Pantoum. A difficult form indeed but you have made it look so easy. I love this form. ~Pamela


  • bedovich
    May 23, 2007

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    wowwwww outstanding masterpiece the image the poem the lines the imagery are great well done : i love it loads


  • PerVirtuous
    May 23, 2007

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    Fantastic! Standing ovations. Flowers.
    This is good. She will have quite a pair of poems! I love it. Three bunnies.


  • Pure Thought silver member
    May 22, 2007
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    Neptune may be the king of the sea,

    But here on land indeed the women are in control.
    Well written,
    Buddy


  • Luna Tique Fringe
    May 22, 2007

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    Wonderful! I love the ocean and it feminine aspect.
    You spoke of this very well, you created magick.


  • Desire gold member
    May 22, 2007

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    Precious!!!

    This is beyond Precious!!
    Holy Moly what Love You have shared and the images are stunning
    Beautiful form used and I just want to go swimming~
    Thank You for sharing the Serenity- Sharing Paradise~
    Definitely takes the cares away

    Loved it!!
    Form Queen

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~

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