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Paper

It doesn’t seem that long ago,
Skies where blue
And I was seven,
Having a blast with my origami aunt.
Everything seemed so perfect
Chanukah was here and everyone seemed so happy.
Me,
I was preoccupied.
Doing origami in the car and in the library.
Paper covering my emotions.
No one knew what was going to happen,
And it seemed as if nothing was ever going to happen.
I was excited about going home that day,
Being by my dad’s side again
Like I have done so many times before.
And my sister spending time with my mom.
She was too young to understand.
On our way home
And everything seemed so fine.
My sister and I laughing in the back seat
As my aunt told us stories.
Then a call,
She knew.
How she was so strong,
I will never know.
She kept telling us stories,
She was so smooth.
It wasn’t until we came home
And the paper was put away.
That we knew.
Dad died.
The world stopped.
And everybody cried.
My world filled with tears,
I couldn’t even imagine
What was to come in the next years.

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My dad died when I was seven, this is the memory of the day I found out.


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  • jacbgd2 gold member
    June 13

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    I simply had to revisit this poem again.   I can feel the pain of my husband's death to this day and its been 30+ years ago. I still miss him so very much...

    If I spent my whole life looking, I could never find another perfect husband as he was.   I sometimes still cry myself to sleep when I start to think of him, when I face another problem, when something is going on with our children and grand-children.    Just Saturday night our grand-son, that he never got to see, graduated from high school.  Our daughter, his mother was only 8 years old when her father was killed.  I want to say, I thank you again for sharing this piece with me.

    Joyce

  • Judith Chandler
    July 2, 2008

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    So much was implied and understated as the story went along; you make an interesting point about the way kids get told about these things when something happens. Of course, nothing would be the same again; you went into another part of your life quite suddenly.

    Thank you for entering my contest.


  • ItalianGurrl
    September 23, 2007

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    thats so sad, but i can totally relate. i went through the same thing with my grandfather, but i was 11 and me and him were incredibly close. i feel for you. great poem, really emotional and im sure it will touch everyone who reads it. good luck in the contest!

    ~Rachel~


  • Florida Sunshine
    May 27, 2007

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    How heartbreaking

    It's tough to write about something so close to home~ I hope through your writes you might get through it. Good luck to you in the contest!

  • jacbgd2 gold member
    May 26, 2007
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    I am in tears and speechless!!!!!!!! This is fully packed, emotionally fill piece of work and I know all my children can identify for your feelings... The life changes that come with the death of a father can be really hard and difficult to adjust to!!! I know! I watched as my children lived these changes, not to mention the changes I had to go through as a young mother whose hold life was built around her childhood sweet heart, her husband!!!!!!
    We had been married more than half of my life. We married when I was 14yrs and he 17yrs!!!!!!!! He died when I was 25yrs... I still haven't gotten over losing him and I guess I never will!


  • Southern Twilight
    May 22, 2007

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    this is so sad...

    i seriously shed some tears...

    This is really well written in creative prose form, but its really sad...
    Im really sorry.

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