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Visceral Curiosity

Droplets of sour sweat
Trespass along frozen lips
Etching the taste of the beast

Upon innocent tongues


Apelike hands rake anemic ribs
Leeching onto seashell skin
Invading innards like coarse sand
Burrows between fingers and toes


Arms buried in rich darkness
Voices erupting in agony
Bathing in visceral curiosity
Vagaries of human dissection

Strands of blood-soaked organs
Dangle from their shredded abdomens
Chests full of morose treasures
Spilling the floor where he dismembers

Sensations over heightening
Paranoia’s crescendo striking
Adrenal glands flood the gates
Worming through a perilous fate

The inescapable devourer
Perverting the air in putrefaction
Belching groans of hysteria
Lashing out in pangs of bloodlust


Hunting shadows dispel conscience
Clawing apart with grizzly aches
Horror drains into their souls
Rendering sweet traumatic pleas

Flailing under bars that won't recede
Lamenting death's silent reprieve
'til they black out to rot their remains
Tangled up in his white knuckles

Author notes

Not sure I'm satisfied with the end arrangement so I may edit shortly after I submit (I seem to see some things afterwards) and so I did see some stuff I had to change. It's still rather sporadic but I guess a killing spree should be.

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  • Jehdin tal Darasin
    June 4, 2007

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    Fantsstic!! Great imagery. Can almost smell it..which is alarming..hehe.
    It daraws the mind in very well, creating a vivid scene.
    Nicely done.


  • The13th
    May 22, 2007

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    i'm almost speechless

    all I can really say is damn. so much force in these words. Sick twisted images swirling through my brain. I love it. It whets my appetite for death and destruction. Great work with this piece thanks so much for posting best wishes and good waves. ~Tai-san the 13th poet


  • Synthetic-Nightmare
    May 22, 2007
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    WHOA.....

    This is a wonderfully done piece, in fact, i'm adding this one in the finalist. It's very, very sick and full of gore. Just absolutely ASTOUNDING! You do great at this kind of thing, keep at it, you've got wonderful talent and the imagery makes it all the real!
    O.O