Hayley thank you for coming into my life
thank you for letting me share
the most precious gift in this world
which is your life
I am so honoured and privledged
to be able to call you my girlfriend
then one day my wife
i will love and treasure you till the day i die
you have given me happiness
which i'm going hold so tight in my hands
never let it go
you have entrusted me with your heart and soul
which i will forever keep in me
i promise babi to make you smile and laugh
also to make you the happiest woman in the world
as you have done for me beautifull
you often ask me why i say your gorgeous and beautifull
here is why babi
your a vision. An amazing vision of beauty
both inside and outside
your hair is so soft and lovely
your smile could melt any icecap and can set sail a thousand ships
it makes me melt inside with love and beauty
now those magnificent eyes they're so beautiful they take me to the most amazing places which i share with you
your lips are so passionate and joyous to taste
your kiss steals my breath away
your neck is so soft and tasty your boobs are perfect and delicate
your stomach is perfect and beautifull
your personality lights up any room
the glow and aroma you set off has me hyponitised
and i never want to wake up
the love you hold inside you is so much that you can't help but share it
you're my rock babe
you're my everything, my world, my heart, my soul, my everything
thank you for being my girlfriend i love you so much
one day i hope you'll be my wife
for now you're boyfriend soon your husband
A contest entry
- Touch My Heart with Tenderness by baawri.
460 points, ended May 27, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Find Love Again by FallenFrmGrace.
600 points, ended June 1, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wonderful
I wonder first of all why no background has been selected. Then I proceed to read the poem. Wowwww. A lovely description about the beauty of beloved. The poem combines a nice blend of emotional as well as sensual love. The lover you have potrayed is an ideal one. Every gal would wish such a boy friend. The poem is full of nice metaphors and this particular one impresses me most.
your smile could melt any icecap and can set sail a thousand ships
it makes me melt inside with love and beauty
Besides, I would like to mention there are a few grammatical errata which you need to check or the poem is best. It is going to win many contests in near future. I like it a lot. May centuries long be your and Hayley's love stories in the world. Keep it up.
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Thankyou for your kind comments it was very graciously recieved im not very good with gramma i appologise for that i would like to ask you if you ever have any sparetime would you look at some of my other work and let me honestly what you think thankyou once again for your comment it made me smile scullion x
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Stephen baby what can i say, im breathless, lost for words, your ability to put your feelings for me into words is a gift, i know that through writing i am capable but i suspact that im having a temopary glitch, BUT i promise that one day soon i will share with you my love and transform it into a beautiful poem that will lift you to the heavens. im so in love with you baby xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
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