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Different And Alone

I used to be like them
To conform to their rules
I used to be the same
Just one more clone
I was surrounded
Never all alone
I had all those friends
All of them another clone
But then I broke the chain
I did the forbidden
I changed for the better
I became different
All that I changed
All that made me different
Was what seperated me
From all the rest of them
So now I am alone
And now I am different
And I will not conform
And I will be myself
No matter how alone
No matter how different
For I will stay alone
And I will stay different

Author notes

Option Two
"To be alone is to be different, to be different is to be alone."Suzanne Gordon

I think I did a bad job on this. I was distracted when I wrote it. Please be nice when you tell me it is horrible.

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  • Dlvvanzor
    July 15, 2007

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    No, I don't think it's horrible. You're successful in pointing out one view of individuality. Not horrible. I like it, in fact.


  • Musical Renaissance
    July 1, 2007

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    Apparently, other people agree that isn't a horrible poem! Yes, people are different and alone, but that shouldn't get them down. Where would we be if everyone was the same?? Great write.

    ~*~Dawn~*~


  • NotAMolly
    June 5, 2007
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    Other than being a bit bumpy, I thought the "bones" and the idea was spot on! You hit a universal problem that many people face, and yet you kept it personal. Maybe if you refined and polished it a little, you might be happier with this gem that you produced!

  • Dark Edge
    May 24, 2007

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    Why should I say this is horrible? I thought this was great! I happen to like poems like this so I don't see any reason to lie and say: "It's Horrible". I just can't do that. Good job, I liked the rythem and the content. I couldn't weave this quote at all so don't worry. GREAT job!


  • Lady-Pegasus
    May 23, 2007

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    ACtually I think it has a wonderful basics to it, perhaps a very slight bit of refining, some of the lines a tad bumpy and the rhyme off in a place or two, but the main of it is wonderful! Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e


  • Dark Whispers
    May 22, 2007

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    I really liked this poem, it had a nice flow, and it was word very nicely. The message of the poem was beautiful.

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