When wind has blown
all thoughts
from mind
and the morning sun
is rising
I simply enjoy
the fragrance of rose
in the silence
of my being
A moment of perfection
Until slowly
but inevitable
my brain starts
a new day of planning
A contest entry
- Silence by -ButterflyCuts-.
300 points, ended June 6, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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A nice pause
& then the start of a new day. Brilliant in it's beginning. a fine wtite for sure
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A very calm, peaceful poem. I like it a lot! It's very reflective. Great job!
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very good
"When wind has blown
all thoughts
from mind
and the morning sun
is rising
I simply enjoy
the fragrance of rose
in the silence
of my being" - excellent
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Thanks for your comment. Just as you I thought that was the best part of my poem, but I was afraid it wouldn't be long enough. But actually I think the last part doesn't really add something.
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