Your my Gaurdian Angel
and you don't even know.
You helped to save my soul
from the darkness that threatened to consume.
You were there
in my times of need.
You kept me from doing
the one thing I wanted to do.
My uncle died and
part of me did to.
But you saved me,
from all the pain I endured.
Your the love of my life,
something I'll never show.
Your my Gaurdian Angel
and you'll never know.
Author notes
this is about a boy that was a brother to me at times. who three years ago became the love of my life. I still love him but he don't care. Now he's going awa and I'll never see him again. But this is to him. My Guardian Angel. He is as I say. He has saved me countless times from the depression that has ruled my life for years. I love him for that.
A contest entry
- Worthy? by shirk.
500 points, ended June 2, 2007, 22 entries
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Hmm...This is alright, not really my forte, but it was a nice change. It seemed...not professional...A lot of the vocabulary seemed simple...and the structure/style was a little young. I'd like to see some literary devices...i.e. metaphor simile alliteration assonance ect. I think you have a good foundation, but I'd like to see some more things done to it. <3
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I have had that feeling myself - where someone appeared to be helping me as a guardian angel but they were unaware
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