photo of baby
stare with me
strongly relate back the features
in face as ten fingers and toes,
what's the other exactness,
can you see too such inches
with no shame of camera
to measure yet
statistics can't be the first said treasure
and then can you envision strolling not only strollers
and if older needs would old fashioned good tradition be
right as retro for you to have the child turned towards you?
moment the number at forehead?
giggle size
I am stunned by more than the thumb...
ah, hum at another comfort count!
Nickname before bambino it be to you
The theater of together with blurry settling
personality plucking from mouth as to guitar
up or down is your nipple string strung
fingernail to comfort tasted
or clumsily just getting acclimated
as this newborn will be dining in ambience
tongue on one, little hand on supply second for lips
perceive the visual news
of who's with you looked at
closely not just gender distance
body movement as no other
let's see results of celery rolled with much
to muscles of limbs not just mine
I love the garden I love my baby!
I think of just wrapping up after unassisted birth and not needing to check the middle question first...
I would divulge boy or girl in final notes of overnight challenge about capturing appearance in haiku probably. prominent by what prompts?
Author notes
use only words, please, poet --
edit's in progress with this one
my smile?
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stunning detail to fingers written in this poem. what do they symbolize? is there adoration to the small fragile limb of the infant? what does "giggle size" refer to?
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does daisy look like a daisy?
"edits" should be without apostrophe (not to discourage you!)
are you planning to have a contest with baby pictures? i have a picture to show you of myself, though it's not a baby one... http://individual.utoronto.ca/detectivediana/me.jpg
i'm 8-10 years old here. i thought i'd share it with you!
if this isn't about a real contest, i think it's a splendid and thoughtful idea for a poem. i get to imagine a baby (or babies), and think about his or her features: how many fingers and toes do they have? the "number of forehead" is interesting; i wonder if you purposely did not pluralize forehead, because you feel that there will always only be one (so they are not conjoined twins, then, and will always be a picture of one baby only). i also feel like this line relates to the contest idea, where the baby is wearing a number to indicate which contestant they are.
i wonder if the wrapping up means simply making the newborn baby feel warm and protected, and not worrying whether they have ten toes and ten fingers. -
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daisy is thickening hair but has that soft earthy essence
detectivediana (a boon to want good),
Thanks so much for making me know even more how my walks among green and blue aren't as good as when with a human face and there's space for more precious thought than just surrounding people. You were cute in record, and are in word smoothed out...
This is a true inspiration I'd like to see judged --
delivery is much more personal than that first hospital scream, it's a boy or girl. I learned of that before I saw my daughter's presence, her profile was sung to by me and calmed down I might say after general womb practice when I spontaneously got to use the feminine name choice upon the announcement of who they just separated from me for weighing or something.
With approaching thoughts of a second child, I have gone the direction of easiest transition and that is with one's own body's momentum mostly, which I could see for the drowsy gaze of an individual lactation look... width and depth observed would first be at countenance I'd think.
sso the count isn't just on toes, fingers for gladness but sizing up that forehead even with that first focus, not disregarding the other but not getting it out of order in normal flow of things. I liked your rationalization there on most being non emergency, but neither making assumptions but pausing rushed checks sometimes. [neat pageant attachment association, but the stare at the infant for writing competition consideration would be the prime one of privacy held for what gravitation of details?]
Active editing can't be stated as edit is in... or apostrophed?
2:38 slurpies lunch isn't there but muddiest walk afterwards,
Carolyn
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