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Looking back

Looking back to childhood days
Hoola hoops were all the craze
Suit puddings, bread and jam
Hiding from the tally man
Spinning tops and skipping ropes
No chance then to dash our hopes
Sticklebacks and climbing trees
Picking blackberries, scraping knees
Awful memories that I have
Of Aunt Doreen's outside lav
In the winter full of ice
In the summer full of mice
Looking back can be such fun
But don't forget the past is done
Moving forward is the place
To put a smile upon your face

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  • annamoy
    August 15, 2007

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    Lovely piece of nostalgia here and not unlike one I wrote about growing up in the fifties. I remenber my grandma had an outside loo - very creepy at night. I love the rhyming in your poem, nicely written.

    Ann

  • Mercury Rising
    July 29, 2007

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    Loved it! Your rhyming is wonderful the whimsical nostalgia expressed in this piece if fabulous.

    David Michaels


  • Kimojuno
    July 12, 2007

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    Good job.

    Was it a intential rhyme? In any case this was GREAT, I really do appreciate people entering into the contest, and I apologize about not judging sooner but this was hard. I had already read the poems, and I wasn't sure who should win, and I apologize that not everyone can win. This was a great poem though, and you're right - we can not go back.

    "Looking back can be such fun
    But don't forget the past is done
    Moving forward is the place
    To put a smile upon your face"

    With that said this wasn't exactly what I wanted, but it was good nonetheless, and did fit so yes it is a good fit in the contest.


  • Unstoppable
    July 4, 2007

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    Cute

    I loved the mood this sets! So cute and vivid. I love the way it flows. Great job on this poem. Much luck in the contest. I honestly believe yours is one of the best. My favorite part is the last stanza. Past needs to be recognized as done and the future is what is needed to put a smile on your face. Great ending.


  • Mrs Mulholland
    May 31, 2007

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    Another amusing poem from you and you are definitely on my list of favourites! I hope you will drop by and read some of my first posted poems here - they are a bit depressing as I have been feeling a bit sorry for myself recently but you have cheered me up! Dorine is a very unusual name but I suppose she must have been very old to have an outside privy.

  • Eusebius
    May 23, 2007
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    bravo

    Neat, nifty, spiffy and lovely! Brought back memories...loved it! bravo... bravo... bravo...


  • Jadon
    May 22, 2007

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    "Those were the days..."!!

    I guess my comment will post a picture of an outhouse to remind you of "Aunt Dorine's outside lav". Sorry for the "awful memories"!
    Fun times eh? You write from your memories as a little girl. I would have to add my pocket knives, marbles, bikes, forts, popsicles and matchbox cars. Thanks for the opportunity to look back. Lotta fun times there. Sorry to have missed out on the frozen "lav"! Jadon

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