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Looking Through Ginny's Eyes

Just because I'm the youngest
doesn't mean I'm dumb!
Fred and George are two-faced
and I deal with Dad and Mum.
I miss Charlie every day
even though he writes momentarily.
Ron excludes me from all the fun
just because he thinks I like Harry.
Percy is more annoying than Howlers
and thinks the Ministry is NEVER wrong.
Bill is gone and hardly ever home
but when he visits he tries to stay long.
I may be tricked into doing things unvoluntarilly
but I still have a good head on my shoulders!
If you don't believe me just look out the window
Fred and Ron are outside making candy taste like boulders...
........................they're hopeless.
But no matter how much I complain about them
or say I can't stand living with six syblings
I love my family more than anything in the world!
..........most days




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  • Marshall013004
    June 22, 2007

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    that was cute , ginny does have a hard life with all those boys and then not being able to come out and tell harry how she feels until this last book and then they break-up. poor girl. i think you did a nice job!


  • Sorrows Redemption
    May 31, 2007

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    that was... okay...it was definitely cute. "Syblings"is spelt siblings, "Charlie writes momentarily????" I realllly think you should change that word..moemntarily is used out of context (periodically?) Howlers aren't annoying, their scary to get, so i'd use like Filch or Peeves or mrs. Norris in that line (but that you COULD leave and i'd be ok with it..the other two corrections, not so much )
    otherwise, you have a really cute poem!


  • ItalianPride09
    May 27, 2007
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    Cute!!!


  • Corinthians13-4
    May 24, 2007

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    This was funny, and I could really see Ginny reciting this poem. The rhythm was a little choppy, but nothing a little revising can't fix. Congratulations on being the first entry in my contest! Best of luck!!
    Erin


  • DeathtoloveShade gold member
    May 23, 2007
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    I love it

    Great job seems like something Ginny would say totally awsome keep up the good work

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