I held life so secret
in a moment it was gone
I felt so empty and full of hate
I needed to get out of this awful place
With pride to hide, the shame I fight
and clothing to cover the bruises of this life
things you touched never the same
but I got back my good name.
strong to a tee
I am the lucky you see
you live with the guilt
Just for a time
but with the love
of my family and friends
I am able to be free
and me again
A contest entry
- friendship and rape - dedication to my friend. by petrichor.
700 points, ended June 2, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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i love you soo much!
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Wow
That's nice. Told from her point of veiw without graphic details. The layout looks like a scull.
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Powerful poetry. I think it next to impossible that anyone else could of written this poem. It possess your poetic strength and your unique style. You made this piece come alive and I am sure it will inspire others to break free...
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never let go..
i know these feelings and yes YOU will prevail!!
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its always nice moving into a better place aint it...with the HOME SWEET HOME picture on the wall nice n crooked n the WELCOME MAT turned around facing OUT on the doorstep
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nice piece if i dont win it i hope you do cause your piece is nice i havent read the others competition pieces cause I totally for got about it. but i saw you viewed me and i always want to know who views me so i read your profile and this great piece. good luck
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very good
i thought that this was a powerful write there are so many that fall victum to their selves and can not escape the pain of whatever so all i can say is keep doing well
love the papa
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This is such an inspirational piece. To be able to leave such a dark place and let yourself be free once again. To walk away from such abuse takes alot of courage. I for one am very proud to see that someone can walk away from it and yet write it in such a way that others can draw strength from it and know that there is a way out. Great writting.
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I liked this, howver there are some odd mistakes that you'll have to take care of. But they are just minor typos. I don't know, but on the first line, the last word, did you mean secret? And also line 4 'allful' should be awful.
Apart from that, I did enjoy the poem and the message at the end, it just shows me there is life after rape and abuse. Thank you for your entry, and please put your screen name and real name in the authors box, unless you wish to remain anoymous.
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