here i am
there i was
times have changed
unknown cause
there's my heart
heres my soul
pain and hurt is disguised
so it doesn't show
walls of terror
walls of jade
i feel so lost
hope is beginning to fade
wandering around
waiting,
kind of hoping
i won't be found
hiding in this dark tunnel of lies
caged in with this door i have made
the darkness swallows me
yet its strangely comforting...
but all too familiar
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Written July 31st, 2003
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Woo! Great work! ^.^ Keep it up.
-Lillith -
I wanted to come and return the favor for your comment on my poem and wanted to say THANK YOU VERY MUCH! I also have to say that I absolutely LOVE the first stanza of this poem... what a wonderful way to open it up! Thank you so very much for sharing this. Keep up the amazing writing. *Sonya*
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"hiding in this dark tunnel of lies
caged in with this door i have made
the darkness swallows me
yet its strangely comforting...
but all too familiar"
That is absolutely wonderful. Great job! I can't wait to read some more of your work.
Make it funky, honey-honey.
~Jessica~
dangerous-angel -
hmmmmmm...
i like it!
especially the last stanza.
the separation of the last line is very effective.
~Clare -
excellent
Great piece. Nicely worded.
I have one suggestion. Not big though.
but all to familiar
I think 'to' should be 'too'. It just sounds better and kind of annoys me seeing that and knowing that it's there.
I really enjoyed it.
Keep it up and never stop writing.
Best Regards,
Midnight
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