Body My House
Mind My Cage
fervent acne colored nightmares
light wet nights
and album covers
and stained sheets illuminated
and raw flesh
and bright dark things are
to make it go away
sticking morphine in the arm and eating meat
A contest entry
- completely anything you want! NO RULES WHAT~SO~EVER! by ibsons hysops.
1000 points, ended May 30, 2007, 65 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This piece is brilliant! I loved the metaphors, the imagery, and the flow. The meaning behind this poem is so bold and grasps the mind. I found no trouble with the line "bright dark things are", for it seems that contrasting words give a poem a gift, for life does seem to be powered by two poles that work together, though opposites....and darkness is only the absense of light. Well, I wish you the best of luck in the contest, hope to see more of your work in the future, and thank you for sharing!
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BrIlLiaNce ThaT cannot B compared! U R A Finalist!
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I like it, although the line "And bright dark things are" seems kind of awkward...




