Loving beyond reason
But not beyond the heart
Memories pon memories
Trapped within my thoughts
I see all of you
In every reflection
Are you truly there?
Or is this just another hallucination
Out-stretched arms into nothingness
Am I just day-time dreaming?
But there you are vividly in my eyes
And for you I will never stop reaching
Searching, with eyes wide open
Losing you over and over, as I awake from my Dreams
Feeling your presence, everywhere
So what! can all this possibly mean
Rising every morning
Before the night, has yet to die
Your image completely, surrounds me
Enhanced by thoughts of you, in every sunrise
Staring out, into today
Were you truly meant, to be mine
Or is this all just another illusion
Imagined within my mind
Can this all be good for me
Truly! – I do not care
For I cannot open my eyes, to reality
Of one without you, there
My dreams! bring nights of joy
And leaves me, with days of pain
For if I cannot have you, in the Light
Then I’ll be waiting for you every night...”On the Astral Plane”
Peace
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very good
very good write -
Attractive concept, but confusing
I go nuts over poetry that refers to concepts such as the astral plane. My first impression is that the piece is a bit confusing and jilted, with a style of capitalizing words in a pattern that may escape me. As it is, it disrupts the flow of the poem for me. It's difficult to follow in its form and to comprehend the piece. I see the story of falling asleep and waking to a new day, although its meaning is mostly hidden due to the distracting method of capitalization and unusual form of wording. It's my opinion that it could use a rewrite to fix the difficult writing style and make it easier to follow.
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