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~ Silver Fish ~

Missing image

~*~

Reflect

each silhouette,

presence of many years,

old memories we have to tell.

I shall cherish our time.

Relationships

are few.

I fear the day

when I see a storm cloud.

I miss you looking back at me.

Sometimes I look around,

and just the birds,

flying,

hovering near.

I see silver fish swim,

and I watch a canoe pass by,

but there is nothing more

than to await

your face.

I wonder, if

clouds ever laughed at us

floating slowly by on purpose.

I wish I could touch your

tempting shoreline,

I would

grace it with love.

I would build sandcastles

of romance, and a moat dug deep.

I would keep your tides low.

I would do this,

for you.

~*~

Author notes

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*Behrquain Swirl*

 

~ Created by Me ~

 

 

Syllable count:

 

2-4-6-8-6-4-2-4-6-8-6-4-2

 

The second  ( 2 ) syllable line MUST

correspond and lead into the next

*Behrquain* creating a Swirl ~

 

In this particular

*Behrquain Swirl*,

the syllable count is:

 

2-4-6-8-6-4-2-4-6-8-6-4-2-4-6-8-6-4-2-4-6-8-6-4-2-4-6-8-6-4-2

 

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  • Knight70 silver member
    July 5

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    I love the creativity with this romance piece in a form of your own creation.

    I think the recipient of a romantic piece such as this would be smiling from ear to ear. Beautifully written.

    Don


    • Arkbear gold member
      July 5
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      Thanks Don....that's very kind of you....blessings,

      Bear -


  • tomisb
    May 22, 2007

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    Swirl. The whole poem swirls slowly through my mind. Memories, time, now and then the fish spin again the water clears and I start all over again. Beautifully done as always. Love, Tom B.


    • Arkbear gold member
      May 22, 2007
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      Tomis ~

      You're very kind my Friend ~

      Our paths have not crossed much as of late, yet I am with you in thought as I race across AP from one job to the next, seeing your name on the page, yet not enough time to slow down for a quick hello ~

      I shall try to arrest that bad habit ~

      Sincerely,

      Bear ~


  • smiley
    May 22, 2007

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    Excellente

    I loved the poem and I loved the form that you have created.. great poets can write on anything...


    Yvonne


    • Arkbear gold member
      May 22, 2007
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      Yvonne ~

      Thank you for taking the trime to review another one of my poems ~

      I get so caught up, that I don't return reviews as much as I should ~

      My apologies ~

      I will try harder!



      Bear ~


  • StarEyes
    May 22, 2007

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    OK! That is it! I officially give up!!! You have created two beatiful forms of poetry, and I am still struggling to get my idea to work! I think I am just gonna leave the creating up to you!!!!!!!! hehehe.

    This is amazing!!!!!! How you do it soooooo well, I will never know!!!! Keep them coming my dearest uncle!!


    Big Bear s

    I love you!

    Nyetta


    • Arkbear gold member
      May 22, 2007
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      My Dear Niece ~

      Nyetta ~

      I know you were trying to joke with me....but if you ever give up trying to perfect that new Form of yours, I'm gonna come over there with a switch!

      You make me laugh though

      Just let it flow into your heart........and don't push it ~

      It will come ~

      Uncle Bear ~


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