Everyone's in bed,
i sit awake.
thoughts spinning in my head,
this is more than i can take.
I'm bending and twisting,
my mind won't set me free.
the bodies i have buried,
my mind won't let me sleep.
it talking to me,
i don't know what it means.
the loudest voice
is the one i heed.
my swollen bloodshot eyes,
awake morning and night.
staring deep inside,
somebody turn out the lights.
I can't sleep.
i can't sleep.
twisting and turning,
the madness i must tame.
my soul is burning,
i hate this game.
This must be a dream.
can you hear me scream?
do you see the colors?
do you see
the butterflies flutter?
This must be a dream,
this can't be real.
but it has the idea,
it has the feel.
Losing my mind,
unable to rest.
i am so tired.
i'm failing this test.
bang.
Author notes
if you can't sleep, you know what i'm talking about.
Written July 31st, 2003
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Insomniac that I am. Wonderful words about a not so wonderful experiance.
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oOo i really like this one my fav so far
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Great poem!
I thought that it really flowed well and that it had good description!!!
My fave part was:
"I'm bending and twisting,
my mind won't set me free.
the bodies i have buried,
my mind won't let me sleep."
I like the imegrey it pulled up!!
Keep writing!
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hey, i love this, and i totally know wat you mean,
cause i've been just reading for the past 3 days
staight.. well, i had a 10 minute nap, but my cat
woke me up!
Anways awesome write! me love!!!
leah
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hey, ummm....lostsorrow and forgotten are both right...it's really basically about my not sleeping (lost sorrow gave me too much credit), but it does go to how life can cause the insanity (voices, etc.) that is part of the insomnia. It's about no sleep AND how not fair life is.
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I dissagree with forgotten, he did take it somewhere else, wasnt about sleep, its about the madness inside, the "voices" and things that tortue ones being untill he cant do this anymore, its not about sleep nore physical relations, i beleive this is about life and how unfair it is and the things it can bring in demon like forms to taunt and brake ones self. great write ~jackson~
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woot!!! go brandon! this is awesome!! I like the first stanza at first i thoguht you were taking this poem somewhere else not about sleep lol.this is really good!!!!!
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i cant sleep at night, so the title caught my attention. your poem is easy to relate to, i kno exactly what your feeling in each verse. i also like the ending alot, its something your not expecting. really nice job and keep it up! ~strawberi
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