Once upon an Autumn eve,
When I sought my dear true love;
I wandered 'ere a common pass,
And happed a wooden cove.
‘Twas here I found a mass of peace,
Indulged in isolation;
A place of calm and beauty marked,
A hole in which emotions well.
Upon a glance I passed with ease,
This cove of wooden fashion;
To round a bend not far beyond,
And lie wait for my love to come.
While lying there amongst the thrift,
Thoughts of her enclose me;
I look to peer across the way,
And watch her come so slowly.
Aft the closing of forever,
Had once or twice passed me by;
Her hand slipped so gracefully,
Into the loving grasp of mine.
Down the timbered hillside of large,
Our bodies floated together;
To a small gully not far below,
Where on a downed tree we sat.
As we were seated upon this mock,
Our lips grazed each others’;
Passion flared throughout our flesh,
Longing one another.
When want of ease fogged our rapture,
We passed to that wooden cove;
Where I caressed her sated breast,
While we talked of love and life.
‘Twas here we lied with the terrene,
‘Till dawn roughed our faces;
After which we wended home,
Ne’er to love ‘till dusk.
A contest entry
- Something To Hold On To by Nicole Hanna.
300 points, ended July 9, 2007, 13 entries
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1200 points, ended August 12, 2007, 31 entries
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Honorable mention
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I accept all comments and critiques...
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Down the timbered hillside of large,
Our bodies floated together;
To a small gully not far below,
Where on a downed tree we sat.
the flow is perfect here
and the rhythm is grand -
Very good rhyme and meter I enjoyed the read very much thank you for entering
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Wow, this is beautiful, very romantic, I love this.=]
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Think I know the bitch
Sorry, it's very early and I'm trying to be funny. Romance more than erotic, which is good, but the life changing spiritual ah ha experience the contest deals with doesn't come through in your writing, to me. thanks for sharing: I'm encountering many different types of writing that I usually don't see. Dave -
A nice sentimental feeling came from this,
It needed a little more theme though,
Thank you for entering and the best of luck to you!
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This has a very old-world kind of feel to it. I had this idea of Lady of Shallott (something similar anyway) while I read it. Lovely language, and the overall feeling it produced for me. Thanks for entering.
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