Blankets Sold-Out
When it’s Cold-Out
Socks Worn-Out
Pants Pockets Torn-Out
Not one Hand-Out
When the Hawk’s-Out
But still the Hoes-Out
Getting Brothers Sprung-Out
Roof Top Look-Out
Nickel-plateds Stick-Out
Daughters Sneek-Out
And Daddy’s Walk-Out
Corner Hang-Out
Getting Zooted-Out
Almost Completely Forgot About
That’s How my Manz Turned-Out
Strung – Out!
By Just A Trip Outside
Get The Point
Anytime, AnyPlace, AnyWhere is
“ Hood USA ”
This is not John Q. Public but I. M. HOOD
~ Peace ~
Holla @ Ja Boi
TX Leonard
Please tell me what you think
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The flow is so sweet and the way you put this together was pure genius. I think that this piece is so beautiful. Your rhyming skills are on point. The concept in this poem is so freely expressed that it can't be rejected. So, don't stop writing. Read some of my stuff and I'm adding you to my favoritses.
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Thank you very much for the excellent feedback Lyrical Rain and my apologizes for taking so long to respond but travelling thru the motherland and getting much inspirations for future writes but just wanted to shout at ja and thank you for reading and enjoying my writes. I'll be returning the favor promise when I settle back in at home and have my straight zone to read you and comment back this I promise. Peace and Keep your head high
Have a good day
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Very nice. I like the repetition of words.
Great job. Keep it up. -
Roof Top Look-Out
Nickel-plateds Stick-Out
Daughters Sneek-Out
And Daddy’s Walk-Out
Corner Hang-Out
Getting Zooted-Out
Almost Completely Forgot About
That’s How my Manz Turned-Out
actually pretty good.keep the ink flowin.
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Thanks Cracked ice
I took a look at your author Page
I like your analogies and stereotypical
prejudgements people make. Excellent! lay down. I haven't had the chance to read you yet but I will and I will provide you my feedback. I just wanted tro quickly say Thank you for reading me and enjoying my write "Trip Outside" I truly appreciate that. Peace
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yes great introspect
I'm becoming a fan of yor word. hope thats ok. need some return. this piece is definatly one for the books. What is exactly zooted out? I git the rest not just this.
again good one.
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Thanks for reading and enjoying my works. I truly appreciate that. To answer your question " Zooted Out"
means "Extremely High" overboard substance abuser.
Thanks very much again
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Wow
When you think about the flow how a common thread connects it all it makes you wonder how small the world has gotten. No matter where your at its there maybe not in the open but its there. Great work continue to do pieces that make us stop and think
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wow i loved reading that and i would love to read more of your work keep up the great work and i hope to read more some time soon
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