Hardships pour and rain heavily Down
A deluge of life's Regrets
Rivers of sorrows with flood gates Opened
My spirit dragged down to the darkest Depths
Totally alone, My warmth Rescinds
Now drenched in coldness....I am soaking Wet
Feeling cast away with the rising Tides
My heart has hardened and become Isolated
I look for a smile but I Cannot
For only tears come to Eye
For I refuse to look deeper into my Heart
To recognize the vision before I
Beads of despair flow down my Face
For which I'm completely unable to wipe Away
For a lifetime of support and being There
Was just so easily tossed Away
Again the darkness comes for Me
As I stand here high and Dry
I cannot comprehend Betrayal
So I've shutdown once again emotionally Inside
Some are wrapped in the Towels of Kindness
While others are wrapped in Towels of Lies
I need my spirit wrapped in Towels of Love
So my soul can be…~Towel Dry~
Peace
Holla @ Ja Boi
TX Leonard
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Very well done. You've done a great work with the metaphor of the towel and extending it through the piece. Well thought out and put together.
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Poignant Disconcerting
One seeks to understand the capitalization of the final words of each line scanning in vain for an acrostic clue ... Hovering on the border between prose and poetry this composition lays the towel on with a trowel and - while highlighting the need for love - seems to prefer to "shut down emotionally" when confronted with(the perception of) "betrayal" ... surely love is acceptance ? -
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Jonathan ROBIN - Excellent attempt at understanding my reasons for ending capitalizations which is very simple . The last word of each sentence creates its' own
one word stanza secondary poem. Another point "No Highlight" of personal basis but
personal thoughts from my point of view. Seek not to find decipher complex riddles for fundamental values and meanings are always simplistic. Then you'll truly understand my writings. I write not to impress nor express but to stress and press the Mind. Thanks for reading and I appreciate your feedback.
Excellent
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it's very sad! but the last line made me chuckle, i'm sorry, i dont know if that's what your were going for or not, that's just how i felt. We all feel this way from time to time i think. I keep going back to this line "Again the darkness comes for Me"
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Well expressed. You ever hear about having enough sense to come in from the wet. my mom suspected I didn't have enough of that, sense, I mean. Good work, keep writing.
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This poem is very weel done and well written
But what do i know
IDK
Come read my work
PLZ!And i just left this comment to get points
JK IM seiuos though
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