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sweet nectar blossoms
delightful pastel fragrance
graceful buttercup petals
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hummingbirds delight
natures gentle gift to sip
tiny wings flutter nearby
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Author notes
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SEDOKA POETRY
Japanese Form Poetry
Originally was sung as a song;
also written as a note between two people,
Today it has contemporary form by a single writer,
with two different points of view on the same subject
This type of poem is made up of two Tercet stanzas of unrhymed lines.
Each is a Katauta consisting of 5, 7, 7
Both stanzas deal with the same subject
but do not address it from the same view points.
The Sedoka contains 38 syllables (5/7/7 , 5/7/7).
For research purposes, this can be found at:
http://www.shadowpoetry.com/
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A contest entry
- Short Lived Short Form #24 by Samplette.
450 points, ended May 22, 2007, 19 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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A nice description of mother nature's beauty.
I like the form and I also like your choice of words
to bring out this natural beauty of nature!
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I've never read this form before. I am inspired to learn this.
I love to read poetry that tantalizes the senses as this one does. You are definitely in tune with nature's beauty here, Arkbear.
Don
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This is pretty cool. I love both the photo and poem. Amazing write, as always.
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lovely!!
"natures gentle gift to sip'
my favourite line.
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...thank you...bless you,
Bear ~
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i loved the picture at the top ^.^
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Terrific piece of poetry as always my friend. I enjoyed this as it brought back many memories of when I went to visistw my sister in Georgia and we sat watching the hummingbirds fly around us. Thanks for the beautiful words and the great memories.
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gorgeous
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Well done
I like short forms and this has all the right words. I have never given this a try (lack of time hee hee) It is a fascinating form though and you did well with it. congrats on the trophy. God bless you, Mark
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Thank you Mark ~
You are very kind.....* Bear whispers.....and Very handsome*
Seriously though, thank you for your kind review ~
I hope to see you quill give this Form a try ~
Looking forward to it ~
Bear ~
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Ah yes, you and your forms; another delightful poem, must try this form too - it's exquisite and you have won another contest - congratulations.
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Erika ~
You are so sweet hun ~
I have been so busy as of late and I feel like I'm falling behind!!!!!!!!!
Please forgive my absemse from your page!!!!!!!
Luv you!!!!....Watching American Idol as we speak!!!!!
Wooo Hoooo ~!
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Congratulations. Excellent imagery. This is one form I have to work on. Great example.
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Thank you Tim ~
Bear ~
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Precious!!
Congratulations on Your Trophy win Brother Bear
Gorgeous verse You have penned and this is the second Sedoka I think I have read of Yours
This so intrigues me~
Wonderful piece with Peaceful message that brings
forth an aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaw
Loved it and those Hummingbirds too!!!!
Form King
Many blessings to You
Best wishes too
and much love~ Sissy Desire~*~
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Congratulations on the gold. This is a gorgeous write
with perfect descriptive wording. Truly a gem. God bless, Lora
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there is a peace here. Full of energy and the richness of living, but, still, a moment captured that allows a sense of well being to wash up across the soul. Thanks.
Love, Tom B.
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This is a pretty write.
Harrisham Minhas
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A gorgeous entry ... congrats on the gold! x
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A beautiful write and presentation. A skillfully crafted sedoka. Very good imagery, flow and tone. Vivid descriptives. Very nice alliteration and assonance. A delightful piece. Well done!
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A wonderful sedoka. Beautiful imagery laced throughout. Thank you for entering the contest. YOu did an awesome job.
Sam
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This was simply beautiful,
and a wonderful imagery filled poem
Thank you so much for sharing, a delight to read,
so glad spring and all it brings is here,
Thanks for sharing,
Love and Light
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This is a beautiful sedoka, and such a lovely poem to read first thing in the morning. Full of images and fragances, it is a delight to read.
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You're poems always amaze me, my friend!! This is no exception! This is beautiful! A very enjoyable read for first thing in the morning. Put a big smile upon my face! I love watching hummingbirds. They're so tiny...But magnificantly so.
Wonderful Beautiful job! I Love it!
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Hi, such a lovely poem to read while drinking my morning coffee, lovely gentle feel, well I'm off to face another long day, hugs Di
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This would be so cool to do with someone else as a co-write. I love the picture you have with it too. Lots of talent you have there bear.
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*sighs*
My dearest Uncle,
Again what a read!!!!! I am gonna have to figure out the new one that I have been playing with and give you a challenge! LOL. Best of luck in the contest!
Love ya
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Oh so beautiful and creamy and dreamy...how do you do that out of a flower, well no matter, ya did it, and did it well nonetheless.."buttercups"
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