Question: I Ask....
Can the Love of YOUR Life actually be
The Fear of YOUR Own Life!!
You Decide....
My Every Thought - Is of YOU
My Heart Yearns - All for YOU
My Body Thirsts - Only for YOU
I Would Lay Down MY LIFE - Just for YOU
Every Fleeting Moment - I miss YOU
I Count The Hours - I'm with YOU
I Count The Minutes - I'm without YOU
Every Fragrance Reminds - Me of YOU
I Breathe - Thru YOU
I Need - YOU
I Love - YOU
MY LIFE!! - IS YOU!!
ARE YOU??
THE LOVE OF MY LIFE
OR WILL YOU BE??
MY EXCUSE FOR NOT LIVING...."MY OWN LIFE"
So Ask Again!! – Could The Love Of Your
Life Actually Your Fear Of Living....
Your Own Life!!
PEACE
Holla @ Ja Boi
TX Leonard
Please tell me what you think
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Love or fear... In Donnie Darko there was this cult that basically said that life had to paths... love or fear. And in Rent there is a line that goes as followed: "Give into love or live in fear." What is with the pairing of those two? I Honestly don't understand it. Because... love and fear aren't exactly opposites you know?
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well done
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Question: I Ask....
Can the Love of YOUR Life actually be
The Fear of YOUR Own Life!!
when i first read that bit i thought no, but after reading the rest, it makes you think, few words, but very effective. very well done.
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wow that is a very strong poem. I mean if you actually take it all in and think about it..I wow i love this poem i think i'm gonna deff put this as a favorite...Somethign so strogn actually mean a lot. It's only a few words and lines but It makes a BIG difference when you think about it..I think you should keep it up and keep writing like this... Love the concept of it and everything.. It's awesome deffinitaly keep it.Live your own life. Not a life everyone else wants
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I had to re-read your comment and you really and truly got the focus on most of my poem writes.
DON'T JUST READ IT - TAKE IT IN AND THINK ABOUT IT - THEN BAMMM!!! IT'LL HIT YOU THEN.
I don't write only for the eyes to read, I write to
make the mind read.
You, Yourself and Your insightfulnesss is very AWESOME!!!
Little Lady
Peace -
young lady thank you for reading and connecting to my poem here. You totally got the point I wanted to express and I truly appreciate your feedback. As you will see my poem style wraps itself in asking questions and examing fundamental values with the simplist wording. I prefer straight and direct wording over long lengthy vocabularies.
As they say small packages carry the biggest BOOM sometimes. Thanks for reading and enjoying my work here. If you liked this you will probably enjoy some of my others and Thank You so much for such awesome feedback
Peace Little Lady and I can see from your response you yourself look to understand the total package and not just get stuck on "Not Enough Syllables"
Thanks Again - Reading Your Comment was a true pleasure
Thank you
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hmmm
I have to read this one over a few times to get the right message here. not as cut and dry as the rest of your works that you have going . people who make others thier icons risk this . the whole american scene seems to be like this almost.
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