You know you're having a bad day when you...
stop breathing,
turn blue,
fall down the stairs,
and never even stop to wake up.
A contest entry
- You Know You Are Having A Bad Day When... by SmokinHotWhiteTiger.
600 points, ended May 22, 2007, 23 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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I laughed. This is quite good.
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it's very good, soudn's liek a good day to me, when i never wake up.
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Brilliant! There's wisdom in this, yeah if you're not ceasing from breathing and turning blue then you're having a good day so damn well get on with it! Not sure if you meant it like this but it's what I gleaned from it.
Georgia
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this is very funny =] it made me laugh
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Lmao!
Lmao @ this poem! Now that is incredibly sad and I would imagine you either got to be hung over or bette ryet sleep walking for that to happen but thats just a brutal fall and that has got to leave a mark LOL! very well penned and quite an interesting one at that. good work all round though best of luck to yas -
Poignance once again, in Brevity
The shorter the poem, the more weight each word has
I wonder at how it was derived...
--clay
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this is another good write. This poem is a bad day. Very good and keep up the good work.
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Wow, I really like this. A lot of people can't make poems that are short, and yet powerful. I'm sure you grasped the concept of the contest.
And thanks for the comment!
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