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face first.

you know you're having a bad day when
the world turns upside down,
and you loose what little balance you have,
so then you end up lying face down on the floor,
and everyone you thought cared about you just walks on by.

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  • SmokinHotWhiteTiger
    May 22, 2007
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    Ouch!

    I sau ouch because if that ever happens then OUCH! LOL! Very well penned and a very highly unusual poem at that. I found this interesting because the way it was written and the idea behind this. Very nice though much enjoyed reading best of luck to yas


  • Lauren Noir
    May 22, 2007

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    This is so true
    This is so brutally honest
    This is so beautiful

    You got the true essence of a bad day
    And made it feel so real

    Well done, this is amazing

    I hope your days get happier


  • individuality gold member
    May 21, 2007
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    a good piece, not as funny as mine though lol