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Goodbye Our Fighter and Goodbye Our Friend

There's a club on the back streets of a town
Where the outcasts don't care to hang around
But we go there to relieve the pain
For there we lost someone we'll never see again

If you walked inside you wouldn't believe
There there is someone who will never leave
But all the music cannot hide the fact
That he's gone and he's never coming back

We know that you can hear our screams and our cries
We know that you can see beyond the apathetic lies
But can you listen for we just want to say goodbye
And i still can't believe that the music made you die
So now we must let go for the bad and the better
But we promise to remember you forver

Now we will never see you laugh again
Nor can we just go and try to pretend
There's so much that we all want to say
But we all missed our chance on that day

The passing has made enemies get along
Every one of them knows this song
So watch us place a rose on the centre of the satge
Where the music you loved was made

We know that you can hear our screams and our cries
We know that you can see beyond the apathetic lies
But can you listen for we just want to say goodbye
And i still can't believe that the music made you die
So now we must let go for the bad and the better
But we promise to remember you forver

I just wish that we could find a way
To prevent you leaving us on that day
All we can do now is hold your memory
So you though the eyes of the past we can see

We know that you can hear our screams and our cries
We know that you can see beyond the apathetic lies
But can you listen for we just want to say goodbye
And i still can't believe that the music made you die
So now we must let go for the bad and the better
But we promise to remember you forver

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Lady Nightshade

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  • lilblueeyesmine1978
    March 22, 2008

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    This was wonderfully written. Thanks for entering this in my contest. We have probably all lost someone that we love and I hope the pain eases with you too. You never erally forget those that have been lost but the pain does ease. It takes time.


  • filledwithstardust
    January 3, 2008

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    Very Very beautiful poem. It has great emotion, and it really touches me. I would have likes to see more work with your words. Thanks for sharing. Love and Peace, Charlene.


  • Angel Of Heaven99
    September 28, 2007

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    I really like this. A poem made into a song for the one you lost. Great job and thanks for entering my contest. Good luck


  • algoressister
    September 27, 2007
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    nice rhythm....

    We know that you can see beyond the apathetic lies.....echoes nicely...well done...


  • Elvenfairy
    August 26, 2007
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    as good a poem as this is, I don't think I'll be able to use it. Thans for entering my contest though


  • MeaningfulPoet482
    July 17, 2007

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    You did very good with this one.. very good. But I wish you luck anyhow in all the contests and not just mine.


  • JadedxPassion
    July 2, 2007

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    The passing has made enemies get along
    Every one of them knows this song
    So watch us place a rose on the centre of the satge
    Where the music you loved was made

    I found the middle of this really held it together. That was definately my favourite part. There were however some spelling mistakes, but over all you did a nice job. Good luck.


  • Flames-of-Furey
    June 17, 2007

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    this is a great poem although it was not personal I found a connection to Ellie I pictured her reading the words to me and It was so special. thankyou for the support and the entry.
    good luck in my contes


  • Logans-Mommy
    May 31, 2007

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    this is good and its has sort of like a chorus thingym which was nice. but it all seemed very..heard of. not so original. and what i wanted you to put in your author notes is missing. i wasnt kidding.

  • heartofpainfultears
    May 25, 2007
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    i am sorry this happened


  • Dark Reaper
    May 24, 2007

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    amazing

    such heart for someone gone, a beauitful poem for a lost friend. I do wish that you could let go a lil of people. But any ways you keep strong hun and good luck
    TK


  • Dark Magician
    May 23, 2007
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    kewlness

    This was amazing. The words were so deep and emotional. The song moved perfectly. You wrote a great song. However, I am giving you 24 hours to put in the appropriate things in the author's comment box from rule six. Do this and you have been reserved a seat in the prelims.


  • Nephlim
    May 22, 2007
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    Wow. So much feeling behind every word, it paints an incredible seen of dancing and music, and happiness that's so sad because death and tradgedy lays behind it all. Interesting mix, but you perfected it. And the repeated stanza couldn't have been a better choice of words and rhymes.
    GREAT job
    diggin it majorly

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