Aroused (Tanka)
Come, turn off the light
Cherish this moment in time
I plead without words
Raise my hips to greet your stare
Drawn to your bare intentions
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Take me, I’m your’s dear
Love how you put me in place
Taunt me, tease me please
Linger as you watch my lust
Whimpered moans at your mercy
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Submission to you
My lust and desire is you
When we become one
Places reach deep to the core
Suddenly; you grant relief
Author notes
"This is a great form of poetry that flows from my thoughts, though the picture I see is greater, I have summed it all up beautifully in such short verse."
Triple Tanka
Tanka is a classic form of Japanese poetry related to the haiku with five unrhymed lines of five, seven, five, seven, and seven syllables. (5, 7, 5, 7, 7)
In a list
A contest entry
- Romance me through Tanka by InBetweenThoughts.
600 points, ended June 6, 2007, 18 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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awesome
One of your best poem, Amera....I'm happy for you that you got a lots of comments on this tanka poem. -
this is the best poem i have ever seen.
you make it very emotional and sensual
I'm going to try this for sure.
blessings, extasy
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A very romantic, sensual Triple Tanka, although I was not aware we could enter one like this?
Your words are full of passion and desire that arouse the senses! Beautiful presentation and form
Good luck in the contest
Des
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Itza Smokin in here now!!!
This'll knock the socks off any guy and a triple tanka to boot I had to read this one whilst standing in the cold, cold rain Thank you for sharing the romantically hot tanka with us and best of luck in the contest.
Don
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Ooooh yeah!
This is so awesomely sensual and so wonderfully written! Passion just ooozes out of every line; makes one stop to think of that someone to fulfill it
A truly fine piece! All the best to you!
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Very soft and sensual
Beautiful write (Lisa)
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thank you Lisa
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Ok, this is very well done Amera, I think it is very good, very well written,good luck in the contest...Scott
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excellent
Awesome poem u have pen here. Like the imagery. My fav. lines: Linger as you watch my lust
Whimpered moans at your mercy
Good luck in the contest. Saddie23
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Expertly penned
A most beautiful and romantic tanka penned to perfection and a true pleasure to read such a heated piece. Well done. Best of luck in this contest. ~Pamela
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This is the first erotic tanka I have read and it is done well and tastefully. Very vivid and full of passion.
- joanne
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Thank you Joanne
Love,
Amera ♥
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This is deeply sensual and touching. The words are pulsing and wionderful. You can feel the sexual sensation as you read the words. Very powerful indeed!
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This tanka is steamy hot with a sensuous flowing photo to match. Very well done with a wonderful rhythm.
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This is deeply sensual! the flow... rhythm excellent.
I really did enjoy reading this.
Thankyou for sharing such wonderfully vivid passionate desires with us.
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Mmmm submissive erotica...and done so beautifully.
Certainly floats my boat..and this is the first time I have given out applause...mmmmm
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Good morning, I'm kind of at a loss for words on this one as it was unexpected. Hmmmmm, very sensual write. A wonderful choice of well placed words. Romantic with a twist of a little spice
the title fits this well. thank you for your stunning entry...good luck in the contest, have a beautiful day..Ken IBT
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Wow!!
Oy!!!
This steamed up my monitor and I need that squeegee to wipe the condensation-and OMG..
Love the form
Form Queen!!
One HOT number You did and Love it!!
Never done a Tanka and You did a Triple
Just go on with Your bad self
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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You are just getting better and better every day. The flow, form and image here are all top notch. Great show. Obviously, the subject matter is... moving. Three bunnies for this.
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Oh bot that woke me up! Very wonderful losts of images here going through my head. Smooth as silk as you always are!
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Gorgeous tanka chain, soft in it's treatment of submission. Sensually pleasing and erotic without crossing into vulgarity. I enjoyed it.
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Sensual and pretty too - your choice of words demand it to be pretty, a strange thing to say for erotica huh?
You've used the form well to produce a very pleasing Tanka Chain. Well done with this and thank you for sharing 
Love always, Laura
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Splendid Dollface, hunger and desire laced with lust rips through me reading this one..Great picture of me by the way! LOL Ciao xoxoxoxo
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