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The Holy Mountain

Feel the presence
Of the Gods
Killers of fortunes
Darkness looms over us

Freedom from nightmares
Standing on the summit
singing out to the world
To the Gods above

Tales as old as time itself
Soil our minds with lies
Rituals of protests and suicide
Behold the insanity

Behold the incest

Behold the madness

Behold...

Beyond the reaches of the mountain
The holy lands cold and frozen
We gaze outwards to the forests
All covered in spirits

This holy mountain
Is my sanctuary
It is my heaven
For freedom from society

No more liars
No more killers
No more demons
Back to the lands of the lost souls

So we pray here
On this holy mountain
On the summit
And rejoice in the bounty of grace.

Welcome to the holy mountain

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For the ITS MY BIRTHDAY! contest, option 3

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  • Floorboards
    October 11, 2007

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    I can certainly relate to this one, somewhere to escape all this hideousness sounds good to me, nicely written,
    thanks for entering and good luck,
    Floorboards.


  • bignikki88
    June 1, 2007

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    i really like this poem even though i'm not really a spritual person. I really like the way it flows and the messege it gives.


  • Shakari
    May 28, 2007

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    This piece is full of imagery, metaphors, and in all it's detail, it flows smoothly. I love how you speak of the evils of society and your way of escape. I hope all is well, that you keep up the great work, and that you have the best of luck in the contest! Thanks for sharing!

  • restful.soul
    May 28, 2007
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    nice work and good luck x


  • Dark Whispers
    May 28, 2007

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    this sis a wonderful poem, so full of imagrey and life (that may sound a little weird).
    I know exactly whose poem this is it Shuknu ( I would put the other part of your name but I can't spell it ) I just know I'm right


  • ibsons hysops
    May 27, 2007
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    Welcome to the Finalists!

  • LaurenLightning--x
    May 27, 2007

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    Beautiful.

    Moutains.
    I can't say I've been up many, but the ones I have been up.. I felt an escape. So this poem makes alot of sense. I like it.
    Love the lines :

    Beyond the reaches of the mountain
    The holy lands cold and frozen

    Fantastic imagery.

    Thanks for entering and Good Luck!! =]


  • takenfromgrace
    May 23, 2007
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    Ish great. You should write more. ^_^


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    May 22, 2007
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    Very interesting and powerful write. Thanks for entering and good luck.

    Jeannie


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    May 22, 2007

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    a place like that is worth the climb, but to be honest i don't think i could stay there, it is not for me, i think you did a great job on this poem and it was golden, keep it flowing


  • photay.poetry
    May 21, 2007

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    ohh, someone gonna go climb mt,everest from reading this poem. its is soo good. isn't it wonderfull when you jsut stand at the top and look on down and even better when you look up to the sky and feel one step closer to those heavens?


  • Desire gold member
    May 21, 2007

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    Wow!!

    Now this is a Powerful piece and can feel the energy within the repetition!
    Magnificent job on this verse

    Thank You for sharing!!
    Many blessings to You
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~

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