I think I’m slipping and I don’t know why
I think I’ve fallen and can’t see the sky
I thought I know it all before
But now I can’t be so sure
I didn’t think that it would be so
Yet once again I’ve slipped so low
I’ve fallen for him once again
Oh when did this all begin?
When he came over
My unrequited lover
The clouds came rolling
But my heart was never showing
I can never let him know my fears
Or even see my dark tears
He is all that I can see
But he will never want me
Oh what should I do?
I can’t say I ____ you
For me this cant exist
But how do I resist?
I’m so damn undecided
He’s just unrequited
And I don’t have the will
To tell him how I feel…
Author notes
dedicated to my unrequited ____ ...
A contest entry
- Celebrating 150 by intanglio2ring.
750 points, ended May 23, 2007, 31 entries
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bahle! kheili khub!
This is a very well-written piece, and I have no qualms about saying that. Very good write.
sincerely, everybody's favorite crazy redneck,
Pfc James McAmis, USMC
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been there...done that. i know jsut how you feel and this really sucks but ya know, they akways say "many hearts are left broken, by words left unspoken." it's so true and this piece describes that so beautifully. i love it.
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this was a beautiful poem angel =) i enjoyed it very much, you are definitly talented !
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Thank you so much... It had been a little while since I had written anything, and I was afraid that it did not turn out as well as I had hoped it would. Thankyou...
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Oops! Don't say L O V E
This was carefully planned to have that bashful or hesitant feeling built into your poem. Great Job!
Thanks for entering my contest & Good Luck!
Tang
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Thankyou so much...
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Great!
I can never let him know my fears
Or even see my dark tears
He is all that I can see
But he will never want me
I have had the same experience. this piece expressed it so well. good job!
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Thank you so much... sometimes I wish that I could tell him, we've been friends for so long, but I'm afraid to let him too close. I don't know if he is like any of the other guys I've dated, and I also leave for basic training in a couple of weeks. I just wish I had the gut to tell him how I feel before I leave, even if I didn't hear it in return...
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