flowers bloom in spring,
dazzling the curious eye
with their radiant colors.
deer race gracefully
through seas of wild grass and wheat,
weaving with the wind's rhythm.
Author notes
I love how beautiful spring is, with the flowers blooming and the deer running around through the country fields. It just makes you want to go outside and bask in the beauty God has created for mankind to live in. (If you believe in such things.) If not, you still want to go outside just for the sake of how beautiful the spring and summer months are.
A contest entry
- SEDOKA POETRY~ by Malabu.
750 points, ended June 6, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
If you feel anything needs saying, speak up, or forever hold your peace!
Comments
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I like this thought you present
the form is right on the mark...In spring, flowers bloom
first stanza is great...
although you present a spring atmosphere....in second stanza...there a relation to the first view...both are beautiful in there own perspective
I feel the capital letters take away from th beauty of this writing....my eyes are dazzled
thanks for honoring me with your wonderful writing..
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this is a tenderly written sedoka. I like it very much. I think you did very well with this piece. I wish you the best in the contest.
Sam
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