You broke my heart,
I broke your neck.
I slit your wrists and
let them run dry.
The pain I feel will be
inflicted on you.
Hammered screws through
your fingers, your screams of
agony excite me.
You are learning the pain
I feel from the heart you broke.
Your pleading is never heard only
your screams.
After you,the one you cheated
on me with will feel like you do
now.
I'll drag you deeper and deeper into
the pit of my mind , you'll see what happens
when you hurt me.
You are now drowning in the pain I have given you.
My hearts in pieces and so you shall be too.
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Revenge, one of my favorite topics when it comes to dark writes. They can get more horrifying with every word.. which is why I love it so much. Good write! Thank you for entering!
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WOW! Hatred, anger, vengfulness! You managed to capture all these feelings into this poem! It was dark and powerful!
If I could point out, sometimes the flow wasn't as smooth as it could be.
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nice i can feel the hatred fueling from the words well done
nightmare xx
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very powerful..i love this...great job on this the title is pretty sweet.. wow i must say..great job..again Heather
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Oh wow, I wouldn't want to be the one to tick you off. O__o This was powerful.
Good luck.
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Wow
Ok! that was fulll of hurt heartbreak and revenge all at once... kinda creepy though letting go can be hard but I do not think that I could see gong to that extreme!!! -
Grand
I like it. I study forensic science so read about a lot of murders
"You broke my heart,
I broke your neck."
and
"My hearts in pieces and so you shall be too."
are my favourite lines.
You have a fantastic imagination. =]
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