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Waiting for My Muse

Gentle is the breeze that finds its way
Into my window as it rattles the blinds
Ever so softly like delicate castanets,
Lulling me into a peaceful state of mind.

Oh muse, oh muse, come to me now
With graceful whispering reveal
Your literary secrets I humbly implore,
For such would my ailing ego heal.

How I long for the words to flow sweetly
Like honey from a prosperous hive,
For I’ve desperate need of ideas you see
As a poet, on such things I thrive.

Caress me with your stimulating touch
That in past, has brought me such pleasure
And further yet for I am anxious to receive
Your eloquent gifts with good measure.

I plead you would speak as in ages before
That inviolable language of the Poets of yore,
Impart to me I beseech such gifts as you will
As fingers are restless and scarcely remain still.

Gentle is the breeze that finds its way
Into my window as it rattles the blinds
Ever so softly like delicate castanets,
Lulling me into a peaceful state of mind. 

Author notes

Option #6 I feel this is my personal best because it captures the soul and spirit of what a poet is, it's truly from the heart.

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  • someones-muse
    July 23, 2007
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    loved it was vary good thank you for the write


  • Angel of Diamonds
    July 20, 2007
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    wow

    great write well done, and good luck!


  • shutter-bug
    July 16, 2007
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    very nice. the rhythm was a little off, but still a very nice write. thank you for entering!!


  • buggirl
    June 18, 2007
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    I love the imagery of the castanets. thanks for entering my contest!

    Jen


  • Hebz
    June 15, 2007

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    WOW!!

    A deep Excellent write..Love it all..

    Thanks for entering my contest & best of luck

    GloriousGift
    Heba


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    June 5, 2007

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    Truly a fine sharing into this contest; I've been waiting on my muse for quite a while now...guess she's scared away or something
    At any rate, I think this is very nicely written! Thank you for sharing and for being a part of the contest!


  • bleed-it-out
    May 31, 2007

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    amazing

    Your similes and metaphors are great...i can tell you truley love to write you seem very passionate.the flow was fantastic and i love the ending and how you repeated that.


  • TheDemonEve
    May 30, 2007
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    BRAVO. I wish I had a muse such as yours. Wonderful.

    Best of luck and thanks for entering!


  • Paincalledlove
    May 30, 2007

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    Wow... That was awsome. I know the despair of not having a muse to write with. but you have turned the lack of a muse into a muse itself. Amazing!


  • Shakari
    May 28, 2007

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    I do believe that this is a masterpiece. Your similes and metaphors of what makes a poet and it's muse....they were incomparable. Your flow was fantastic, as were the images that your words popped into my mind. Each poet's heart grows stronger as it beats, and yours seems to hold much power within words. Keep up the great work, thanks for sharing, and good luck in the contest!


  • ibsons hysops
    May 27, 2007
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    You R A Finalist!!!


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    May 23, 2007
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    How I long for the words to flow sweetly
    Like honey from a prosperous hive,
    For I’ve desperate need of ideas you see
    As a poet, on such things I thrive.

    these words say so much, a want, a need, a sheer desire to have what we all seek. Great story and subject control. I appreciate your entry my friend, Stay tuned.


  • Wild Mustang
    May 21, 2007
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    I love this piece. It displays the heart of a poet, indeed. Very lovely! Great job! My only correction is that I belive "my" in the title should be "My." Meaning the suggestion is that to be proper grammar, the "m" should be uppercase. Good luck in the contest!

    ~ Wild

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