essence
green or blue
water or
earth
me and you
can it be
no where
in life
is it true
that there's
anything
wrong with
me and you
but now
its much
more
complicated
and the
opposition
so animated
perhaps
there's
nothing
we can do
but let the
world dictate
me and you
i believed
once
very deeply
in love
i believed
once
fate was
dictated
from above
now i
believe
we make
our own
fate
and i dont
believe
it's ever
too late
but i
believe
theres a
time and
a place
when love
will choose
to show
its face
and the
opposition
my be
animated
but it's really
not that
complicated
theres
nothing wrong
with me and
you
just the battles
we'd have to
fight
to see it
through
water or
earth
green
or blue
there will
always be
an essence
of me and you
Please tell me what you think
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though short are the lines, but unique is the style.
got the feeling very well, I liked every little line of it, and it deserves a great applause.
~OM
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wow i really liked this it was really unique. I liked the layout of it, it really added to the meaning of the poem.
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unique.
i enjoyed the flow, it wasfun to read. I like the message that you are conveying here also.
great job
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Wonderful, the way you placed each word, almost making a wave effect, somewhat staccato in nature, which brings attention to important words and helps emphasize how it would sound being read aloud.
Really liked this! (=
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Fabulous! I love the short lines and no punctuation. Great repetition, also.
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