The wind was howling like forever
I fed those fires that smoked and burned
The words we spoke were lost in the ashes
That flew like snowflakes in a storm
I stood beside you at that moment
Before all hell broke loose and then
I was overcome by all your intentions
They choked me with their smoke again.
The love we planned was unforgiving
It drove us to the bitter end
Where lovers despaired in open silence
And desparation was our only friend
While the smoke and fire burned with fury
Around the crematorium that we built
To house the remains of what we cherished
The agony of all our unforgiving guilt
When there's nothing left that's sacred
When the fires burn so hot
We're left with only ashes to decipher
By raking the coals over the lot...
So be my love at my disposal
Pour holy water as I scream
Feed me to your deepest hunger
Wrap me in chains and gasoline
I'll pay the price at any given moment
I'll bear the cost that you propose
And when you're finished hold me over
The furnace where the fire glows
So when there's nothing left to plunder
When you've satisfied all your pain
Pour holy water on the fires
And set me alight to go again...
And when there's nothing left to plunder
When you've satisfied all your pain
Pour holy water on the fires
And set me alight to go again...
Author notes
Dark Love "If there's nothing else to burn, you have to set yourself on fire."
A contest entry
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Comments
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You've used such great description and imagery here, It's very dark and so beautifully written, a great write with a very powerful ending, good luck
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there is some great imagery in this. One thing I found a tad distracting was the cursing in one stanza. I don't think it was neccesary in this poem. I know it has it's uses at times but I believe this poem would be fine without it.
I still enjoy your style of writing so keep it up -
very well written and powerful!
i really like how you ended the poem,
"And when there's nothing left to plunder
When you've satisfied all your pain
Pour holy water on the fires
And set me alight to go again..."
nice job!
thanks for entering and good luck!
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