He whispers in my ear:
How easy it would be!
Never shed another tear,
Spend eternity with me.
Clawed hands upon my shoulder
Urging me to give my soul,
"Remove the blade from its holder,
Slice your heart, no longer whole."
I raise my arm, no opposition,
No angel to stay my hand.
To my heart I change position
To depart from this land.
Foreign, painful, bleeding through,
It goes so deep, it feels so wrong.
To my body a pain so new,
Alien, it just doesn't belong.
As I pull out the blade
I'm pulled from my mind
With imagined pain fade
A knife in my hand I find.
Images of death and thereafter
Rocket through my brain.
Hanging limp from a rafter,
Or drowned in my own blood stain.
I fall upon the floor
And cry into my hands
Wanting nothing more
Than to, by myself, stand.
I cry until my tears run dry
And sobs become so few.
I lay back, look at the sky
and fall asleep thinking of you.
Author notes
I wrote this for a contest, but it ended before I could finish so I figured I wouldn't let it go to waste.
-Nick
A contest entry
- Do you deserve this? by Never Fall in Love.
850 points, ended August 14, 2007, 60 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I really like this write it is an amazing piece.
I can relate to this fall upon the floor
And cry into my hands
Wanting nothing more
Than to, by myself, stand.
I cry until my tears run dry
And sobs become so few.
I lay back, look at the sky
and fall asleep thinking of you
Thank you for sharing this brilliant piece and congrats on the Hm xx Best wishes.
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HOODWINKED!!
yep it is me again...lol
I am making my rounds dear on behalf of the Poetic Bandits. This is a delightfully deep dark write, a very good one if I might say so myself. OKay, off to the next one on my list!
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anonymized my arse
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damn right. lol
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like always wonderful
great job like always you are a great poet
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first off before i even start to read it- I love the background and the picture
wow you have such a talent!
This was....I dont even know how to explain whatit made me feel
You need that angel though
amazing
Once I have the words I'll tell you
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this is really diffrent, i like how your style in this one isnt sometihng iv seen. i like the way the flow doesnt interfear with any of the points. and i love how its so deep. this is brillant, great job.
jess
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Foreign, painful, bleeding through,
It goes so deep, it feels so wrong.
To my body a pain so new,
Alien, it just doesn't belong.
I read last night, commenting today
and my opinion remains the same ..
Excellent!
The ending, well i relate and I dont
I try not to relate, its just so f*ckin hard
And I can say that somewhat, I'm succeeding
Like, blocking everything from your mind
Doesn't work all the time
Yet it helps .. at time
Am I making any sense .. lol
Your rhyme and flow is perfect
Amzaing just like you
NeveR ♥
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WOW. I have to agree with everyone else in that I am so very glad that you decided to share this and not let it go to waste. This is definently one of the best things you have written [that i've been able to read atleast]. The background goes together amazingly with this piece. Absolutly brillant. Wonderful job. Keep up the superb work =]
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First thing i noticed: awesome background! you used the triquetra, thats so cool! And my favorite colors too, black and blue.
I'm really glad you didn't let this go to waste because I think it's one of your better poems. I love the images you describe so well. This seemed to fit so well after I watched constantine and the covenant last night again. Great job, glad I could read this.
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wow...it was beautiful....i'll have to agree it would have been a shame if you hadn't put it on here....it made me want to cry...very touching....keep up the amazing writing...
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Fuckin'A! That's awesome. I'm glad you didn't let it go to waste because it would've been so tragic. A secret tragedy because no one would've known.
Your rhymes and flow are masterful and I love the idea and the end. Especially the end, but also especially the part where you talk about "imagined pain."
Great job. Thanks for sharing. Take care.
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