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the darkness has danced around me with
swords in blind mochery
pay no mind to he whose blood
pumps ashes through his veins...
you are my quest
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Author notes
back in biblical days they used to speak metaphorically.
'pay no mind to the one whose blood pumps ashes thru his veins' simply is to speak of .. pay no mind to the one who does the acts of satan, which is to harm others. and anyone who follows satan by commiting any of his acts is given the final judgement of death, death as in.. from dust we came and to dust you will return..ie: the ashes.
you are my quest would be to speak of ... i have come to speak with one who is pure in heart.... which would be the doctor.
A contest entry
- The Doctor. by Keith Drew.
450 points, ended June 2, 2007, 20 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
thanks for reading.
Comments
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nice deep poem. It's a nice short read too. I like all of the ~
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this is awesome, a short poem that has great power written in it. coolness!
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Nice
Ok well I have learnt something new here.
Your write is short but your words are so very powerful and are able to shout at the readers. This is very creative.
The message behin this is also full of strength.
Well done.
tender-butterfly
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beautiful
and powerful... an idea very well expressed!
an awe-inspiring piece... I love the use of metaphor, your choice of language, in general, for this piece is brilliant!
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Very powerful
I'm amazed at how such a small work of art can lead to such an array of power and blessings in so little words thank you for allowing me to read and comment on your work, Rob -
Very powerful
I have been reading quietly in the back ground trying to find the right things to say, And all I can say is your work is awsome -- Because it gives us insperation..thank you..
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hey thanks robert. yeah, i havent been on much really. got pains to deal w/. but thanks for the insight and three star
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nicely written, and you didn't really need to explain it all in the character notes, its self explanatory, you are a talented writer.
Bookmarked.
Lexy xxx
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You are on fire with this write Missy. Good job, I can't wait to see how this contest pans out. It looks fun, a bit out of my league though I will leave the hard stuff to you ~Tia Good luck in the contest...
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thanks woman. sorry i have not been on much lately. unable to type alot, ya know. just the simple stuff anymore.take care
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Pay no attention to who's blood pumps from my veins you are next...scary ending to his tale! Love it though! ~Sie
Nice job...
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