As my heart begins to break-
I think about how everything I've done was a mistake
into a million pieces of glass,
I try to let the pain pass-
Why do you have to go?
I'll miss you so
I'm twitching
It's itching
Where did all this begin?
this pain is coming from deep within,
I'm trying so hard to see-
Why is it harassing me?
Although I did before,
I don't want to suffer any more
I miss the happiness,
all I want is just one more kiss
All I have left is an unloved heart
Hell is ripping us apart
My heart is broken, my sole is black
I know you're never coming back
This shouldn't be our last goodbye-
I wish I didn't have to lie
I love you, and they're killing everyone
I'm sorry to say, but I can no longer run
Goodbye my dear,
I'll make sure I disappear
For good
Copyright {c} 2007 Hannah Duffin {All Rights Reserved}
A contest entry
- Ever Been Hurt? by Ignis Corpus.
425 points, ended June 15, 2007, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Been there before, hun, but keep holding on. Love hasn't given up on you yet. All the best, my friend.
Best wishes,
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i love the poem its is perfect good luck in the contest my favorite part of the poem isAll I have left is an unloved heart
Hell is ripping us apart
My heart is broken, my sole is black
I know you're never coming back
This shouldn't be our last goodbye-
I wish I didn't have to lie
I love you, and they're killing everyone
I'm sorry to say, but I can no longer run
Goodbye my dear,
I'll make sure I disappear
For good good luck again -
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Thanks so much for reading. I'm so glad you liked it. yea, thats my favorite part too. I'm glad I found this contest.
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ohhhh! A heartbreaker. I didn't quite get this part though...'I wish I didn't have to lie
I love you, and they're killing everyone' What lie and who is they and why are they killing?!?!?! This is ssooo sad! Very well expressed though and I really like the fact that you rhyme. I do more free verse now, but I started off rhyming...it comes so naturally to me. Good job here!!!! -
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Well, the girl lied about not loving the man, and now he's dying, she wants to confess her love for him, but it's too late to have a life together b/c "they" are killing everyone. I don't know who "they" are, I'd like to not know either, b/c it creates some sort of [blah] for the reader, I don't know a word to describe it, it's not suspence, maybe it's wondering or to make them think? Yea, that's it. To make them think. She has loved him almost forever and now that the time with him is going to stop forever, she is like having a break down and is super angry, but she tries not to write with rage, she tries to be peaceful with her anger and pain. Haha, there's an explanation for ya! sooo long! thanks for reading
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